Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The daigram show that the information of production and consumption of electricity in 2014 few country the check
the rate electricity . the help of daigram the first country of china in production of 5,398 and consumption of 5,322 . t
The united states of production in 4,099 and consumption in 3,866. The country of russia in production of electricity in 1,057 and consumption of electricity in 1,038 . The country of japan n production of electricity in 936.2 and consumption of electricity in 856.7 . The country of india canada france brazil germany and last then korea,rep in production of electricity in [redacted phone],9 561,2 530,7 526,6 and last then 485,1. And the consumption of electricity in rate of 698.8 499.9 462.9 455.8 582.5 and last then 499.5 . The over all rate of p-roduction and consumption in few country .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarise the data from the bar chart regarding electricity production and consumption in 2014. However, it fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, standing at only 142 words. While the student lists several figures from the chart (such as China at 5,398 and 5,322, and the United States), the reporting is extremely mechanical and lacks a proper overview of the main trends. Furthermore, grouping multiple countries together with a string of numbers at the end makes the data difficult to follow and interpret. To reach higher bands, the response must provide a clear overview, group data logically rather than listing raw statistics haphazardly, and fully satisfy the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organisational structure of the text is very weak. Ideas are not logically sequenced, and paragraphing is virtually non-existent, with the entire response squeezed into a confusing block of text interspersed with excessive spacing. There is a lack of cohesive devices to guide the reader through the comparisons. Referencing and progression are largely absent, resulting in a disconnected list of data points rather than a cohesive summary. For instance, sentences like 'The country of india canada france brazil germany and last then korea,rep...' combine too many elements without proper transitional markers or logical flow, severely hindering readability.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The lexical range is extremely basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple formulaic structures and repeated phrases such as 'production of electricity' and 'consumption of electricity'. There are numerous vocabulary and collocation errors, as well as spelling mistakes like 'daigram' instead of diagram. The misuse of prepositions and lack of varied terminology prevent the writer from demonstrating sufficient flexibility for higher bands. To improve, the student needs to incorporate a wider variety of vocabulary related to data trends and utilise synonyms effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is poor throughout the text. The response lacks complete, well-formed sentence structures, often consisting of fragmented lists or poorly connected clauses, such as 'The daigram show that the information of production...' and '...and last then korea,rep in production...'. Errors in verb forms, prepositions, and punctuation are frequent and often impede communication. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures being used accurately. To achieve a higher score, the student must focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence contains a clear subject and verb, and eliminate frequent grammatical errors.
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