Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The chart illustrate the top ten countries for the manufacturing of electricity in the year of 2014 . At top of the list is China who create more electricity then the other countries . Then there is below the list Korea which ouput lessely lower then all the other 9 nations . Let's summerise them one by one .
china and United status are top of the list and they make more production then the other 8 states and which are higher then the other status electricity productions . China's productions of electricity in year 2014 was around 5398 billion kWh which is quite higher then the other once . Consumption on electricity by china was quite low then the production was around 5322 billion kWh. While on the other hand , United States makeing of electricity was around 4099 billion kWh and the utilization of electricity was lower then the production was around 3866 billion kWh.
However, there is eight more stature whom production and utilization of electricity was lower then China and United Status . Korea , Germany , brazil, France and Canada are equaly spend thier electricity manufacturing . japan , Indian and Russia are litter bit higher then those lower 4 statue .
in conclusion , two status china and US makes more manufacturing then the other 8 states and korea , germany , Brazil and France make highly less then other 6 status.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to cover the main features of the chart, mentioning China and the United States as the top producers and consumers, and identifying Korea near the bottom. However, the information is presented in a very simplistic and repetitive manner. There is a lack of clear comparison across the full range of countries, as groups like Japan, India, and Russia are dismissed with vague observations. The overview attempted in the final paragraph is repetitive and fails to synthesize the main trends effectively. Figures are cited for China and the US, but the overall development of ideas is limited, leading to a score in the lower band range.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response shows an attempt to structure the essay into paragraphs, including an introduction and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is weak and disjointed. Phrases like 'Let's summerise them one by one' are inappropriate for an academic task. Cohesive devices are either missing, misused, or overly repetitive (e.g., 'then the other', 'lower then'). Paragraphing is poorly handled, with a conversational tone disrupting the formal requirements of Academic Task 1. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationships between ideas.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. Words like 'manufacturing', 'production', and 'status' (used to mean countries or states) are repeated constantly and often incorrectly (e.g., 'manufacturing of electricity', 'eight more stature'). There are frequent word choice and collocation errors, such as 'ouput lessely lower' and 'equaly spend thier electricity manufacturing'. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for discussing statistical data effectively, resulting in frequent strain on the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain severe structural errors. There are persistent mistakes in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The chart illustrate', 'China who create'), preposition usage ('Consumption on electricity'), and comparative forms ('lessely lower then'). Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, with lowercase letters for proper nouns like 'china' and 'japan'. Errors are frequent and often impede communication, though the general topic remains discernable.
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