Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrated the production and consumption of electricity in 2004 by top ten countries.It shows the variable of country production and consumption in billion kWh.
Overall,China produced the largest electricity followed by United states and Russia.Korea.Rep remain lowest at bar chart in consumption and in prodction Brazil is lowest.
At first, China produced 5398 billion kwh electricity and consumed 5322 billion kWh and its shows positive record and surplus amount of electricity might be sold . United states comes second at production and consumption with the amount of 4099 and 3866 billion kwh respectively.Then, russia and japan consumed 1038 and 856.7 billion kWh respectively and produced 1057 and 936.2 billion kWh which is positive that they do not have to be dependent on nebhouring country.
In contrast, Korea consumption and production is lowes with the amount of 449.5 and . 485.1 respectively. Hence China is leading and korea is at lowest in the bar chart. At last almost every country made growth at production although Germany consumption was higher than the production.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting data from the bar chart regarding the top ten countries for electricity production and consumption in 2014 (though mistakenly writing '2004'). There is an overview provided at the beginning and end, highlighting China and the United States at the top and Korea at the bottom. However, several figures contain inaccuracies, such as stating Korea's production and consumption figures in reverse order, and introducing extraneous speculation ('surplus amount of electricity might be sold'). Furthermore, the prompt's year is misstated. While the main features are touched upon, the lack of precision in data reporting and minor errors place this at Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organised into multiple paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body details, and a conclusion. However, paragraphing is somewhat erratic and sentences often feel disjointed due to awkward transitions. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or inaccurately (e.g., 'At first', 'At last'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as pronoun usage in 'and its shows positive record'. Logical progression between sentences is disrupted by grammatical issues and abrupt shifts in focus. Overall, the structural arrangement provides a basic framework, aligning with a Band 5.0 level.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary to discuss the data, incorporating terms such as 'production', 'consumption', 'surplus', and 'respective'. However, there are numerous word choice and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'nebhouring', 'lowes', and 'prodction'. Less common lexical items are attempted but often lack precision or correct collocation. The lexical inadequacies occasionally cause slight strain for the reader, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'The bar chart illustrated' (should be 'illustrates'), 'Korea.Rep remain' (should be 'remains'), and missing articles throughout. Punctuation is also problematic, with spacing errors around punctuation marks and numbers. Because errors are frequent and occasionally hinder comprehension, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.
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