Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The give bar chart illustrates the first ten states for the developing and using of electrical energy in 2014.

Overall, the bar chart of the ten countries that usig the electricity. China was most use and produced electricity but the Korea, Rep were produced and using less energy while comparing the all ten countries countries.

Firstly, in 2014 the China was create the large amount of of electricity the value was 5398 billion kWh and used 52322. United states was producing and utilizing the electric energy (4099, 3866). Then the Russia value was (1057, 1038). Japan percentage was (936.2, 856.7). And the India vlue of using the electricity in 2014 was (871, 698.8).

Secondly, after 5 countries firstly Canada ratio of electricity producing and developing (618.9, 499.9). France was (561.2, 462.9). Brazil was (530.7, 455.8). Second lastly, Germany (526.6, 582.5). Lastly, the Korea and Rep most less value of using and developing electricity just (485.1, 449.5).

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by summarizing the main features of the bar chart, identifying China and the United States at the top, and Korea at the bottom. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the transcribed data, such as writing '52322' for China's consumption instead of '5322', and various formatting issues with numbers. The overview is overly simplistic and contains grammatical errors ('China was most use and produced electricity'). While the main trends are touched upon, the lack of precision and under-developed comparisons place this response at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response is divided into four paragraphs, showing an attempt at logical structure with introductory, overview, and body sections. However, the progression is hindered by awkward sequencing ('Firstly', 'Secondly', 'After 5 countries'), and cohesive devices are frequently mechanical or misused. Referencing is often unclear, such as abrupt transitions into lists of data points without adequate contextual binding. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak, resulting in a score of 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'developing and using of electrical energy', 'most use and produced', and 'most less value'. There are also transcription errors in numbers that affect vocabulary reliability. Less common lexical items are attempted but used inaccurately (e.g., 'ratio', 'percentage' instead of raw billion kWh values). This fits the Band 4.0 descriptor for limited and strained vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the text, featuring basic sentence structures with frequent major errors. Examples include 'The give bar chart illustrates', 'the Korea, Rep were produced', and 'the China was create the large amount of of electricity'. There is a lack of control over tense, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions. Complex sentences are rarely attempted successfully. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 4.0.

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