Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar graph enumerates the comparative analysis of use and generation of electricity in ten leading countries in the year 2014. Overall, the highest rate of use as well as production were noted in China, while the lowest was recorded in Korea.
To commence with, the topmost electricity prouduction and consumption took place in China with 5398 and 5322 billion KWhs, respectively. In contrast, Korea faced the least use of this resource with only 485.1(production)and 449.5 billion kWhs(consumption) in 2014.
Meanwhile, US ranked second with less proportion than China but still had significant utilization and output of 3866 and 4099 billion kWhs, correspondingly. It is then followed by Russia with immense size and population but very low yield with minor difference of in ita
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The student provides an overview in the introduction noting the highest and lowest countries, and begins to detail specific data points for China, Korea, and the US. However, the response is severely underdeveloped and incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence at 'very low yield with minor difference of in ita'. Furthermore, the word count is only 125 words, falling well short of the 150-word minimum requirement. Consequently, Task Achievement cannot exceed Band 4.5 due to the incomplete nature of the response and failure to meet the minimum length.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response attempts a conventional structure with an introduction and body paragraphs linked by cohesive phrases such as 'Overall', 'To commence with', and 'In contrast'. However, the abrupt cut-off in the final sentence severely disrupts logical progression and cohesion. Paragraphing is initiated but remains underdeveloped since the text stops prematurely. Referencing is generally clear up to the point of truncation, but the lack of completion prevents a higher score.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student attempts some appropriate vocabulary related to the prompt, such as 'comparative analysis', 'generation', 'utilization', and 'output'. There are spelling and typographical errors, such as 'prouduction' and 'KWhs', as well as awkward phrasing like 'immense size and population' applied to Russia in the context of an electricity chart. Vocabulary is adequate for a basic summary but remains limited due to the short and unfinished text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Overall, the highest rate of use as well as production were noted in China...'. Grammatical control is generally fair in the complete sentences, though subject-verb agreement wobbles ('highest rate... were'). The writing contains uncorrected slips and abruptly halts mid-sentence with 'minor difference of in ita', indicating a lack of proofreading and leaving the final structure ungrammatical.
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