Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar illustrates the higher ranked top 10 countries in terms of proudction and consumption of electricity in year 2014.
Overall, the consumption and production of electricity had gradually risen higher in China and United States compared to rest of the countries. It had been clearly illustrated the consumption and production of electricity were lower in Korea.
In 2014, around 5398 (billion kwh) production was successfull with the consumotion of 5322 (billion kwh) in China , whereas United States was also leading with production of 4099 (billion kwh) and consumption of 3866 (billion kwh) . Russia and Japan did maintain their level of production and consumption of electricity without the vast differences. However it was noticed a large differences in production and consumption of electricity in India and Canada.
With the production of 871 around only 698.8 billions of consumption was proceed and likely around 118 millions of differences was noticed in Canada production and consumption of electricity too.
In contrast other countries like France, Brazil, Germany, Korea were remarked accountable in terms of their production and consumption without being noticed through vast differences in their production and consumption. However Korea only produced 485.1 (billions kwh) and consumed 449.5 (billions kwh) which is listed to be less compared to top 9 countries.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the task by selecting and reporting the main features of the chart, specifically highlighting the dominance of China and the United States compared to the other nations, as well as noting the lowest figures for Korea. Data is incorporated effectively to support the description, such as citing China's production of '5398 (billion kwh)' and consumption of '5322 (billion kwh)'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in reporting specific details, such as miscalculating or generalizing differences ('around 118 millions of differences'). The overview is somewhat basic but captures the overarching trends. Overall, the response fulfills the requirements of the task adequately, placing it firmly at a band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, starting with an introduction, followed by an overview, and then body paragraphs detailing specific country data. Cohesive devices are used to link ideas, such as 'whereas', 'However', and 'In contrast'. However, referencing and cohesion are sometimes faulty or mechanical, as seen in awkward transitions like 'With the production of 871 around only 698.8 billions of consumption was proceed'. Paragraphing is present and generally appropriate, but the internal progression within body paragraphs occasionally feels disjointed. This level of organisation aligns with a band 6.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student attempts a range of vocabulary relevant to the task, including terms like 'production', 'consumption', 'ranking', and 'dominance'. However, there are frequent spelling errors and word-form inaccuracies, such as 'proudction' instead of production, 'consumotion' instead of consumption, 'successfull' with a double 'l', and 'proceed' used incorrectly instead of processed. Less common vocabulary is attempted but often marred by inappropriate collocations or spelling slips, which restricts the lexical score to a 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing subordinating conjunctions like 'whereas' and 'although'. However, there are numerous grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text, such as missing prepositions, awkward passive constructions ('consumption was proceed'), and incorrect article usage ('the higher ranked top 10 countries'). Punctuation around parentheses is also occasionally flawed. While these errors do not completely impede communication, their frequency prevents the text from achieving a higher band, making a 5.0 appropriate.
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