Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart shows the top ten countries in production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Overall, China is the top country in production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Whilst, Korea, Rep. is least country in the production and consumption of electricity. However, Russia is the country which production and consumption nearly equal.

China is the top country with over 5000 billion kWh in both production and consumption. Second country, US has differnce arround 300 billion kWh in production and consumption. Third country, Russia and US have major difference in production and consumption of electricity, around 3000 billion kWh. Fourth and fifth contries are Japan and India.

Canada produce 618.9 billion kWh electicity and consume 499.9 billion kWh electricity. Sixth and seventh countries are France and Brazil over 500 billion kWh production. Last two contries are Germany and Korea, Germany produce and consume more electicity than Korea. Last country is Korea which produce less than 500 billion kWh electricity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially. While the overview attempts to summarise the main features by identifying China and Korea, Rep., the selection of details is inadequate and confusing. For instance, the statement that 'Russia and US have major difference in production and consumption of electricity, around 3000 billion kWh' is factually incorrect and misreads the data from the chart (where Russia's production and consumption are around 1,000 billion kWh, and the US figures are around 4,000 billion kWh). Furthermore, some details are inaccurate, such as stating that Russia is the country where production and consumption are 'nearly equal' when several other countries show much smaller numerical gaps, and describing Korea as the 'least country' rather than ranking tenth. To reach a higher level, the response must accurately report and compare the figures without significant factual errors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation, with an introductory paragraph, an overview, and body paragraphs grouping the data, but there is no clear overall progression. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and mechanical, relying heavily on transitional words like 'However', 'Whilst', and sequential markers like 'Second country' and 'Third country'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of information is disjointed; for example, the second body paragraph awkwardly mixes comparisons of China, the US, and Russia with a brief mention of Japan and India without detailing their figures. Referencing and logical transitions between sentences are sometimes faulty, leading to a choppy reading experience. To improve, the writer needs to ensure logical links between ideas and structure the comparison of countries more fluently.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The lexical range is limited but minimally adequate for the task. The writer uses basic vocabulary related to the chart, such as 'production', 'consumption', 'country', and numbers. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors that cause some difficulty for the reader, such as 'differnce' (difference), 'arround' (around), 'contries' (countries), and 'electicity' (electricity). Additionally, awkward phrasing like 'least country' instead of 'country with the lowest production' or 'the country which production and consumption nearly equal' demonstrates a lack of precision. To achieve a higher score, the writer must expand their vocabulary range, use less common terms accurately, and eliminate spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent errors. Attempts at complex or comparative sentences are often faulty, such as 'Whilst, Korea, Rep. is least country in the production' (fragmented clause and missing article) and 'Germany produce and consume more electicity' (subject-verb agreement error with third-person singular). There are frequent errors in verb forms, articles, prepositions, and punctuation that cause difficulty for the reader. To progress, the writer needs to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence structures while improving grammatical accuracy, particularly regarding verb agreement and article usage.

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