Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart illustrates the information about the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
overall,china was most highest production and consumption of electricity, and 2nd most highest was USA while germany and korea,Rep was lowest in table chart..
China was produced comsumption billionKWH 5,322,production billion KWH was 5,398.United states was produced production billion KWH was 4,099, consumption billion KWH was 3,866.
russia produced 1,057billion KWH and comsumed 1,038 billion KWH.japan produced 936.2 and consumed 856.7. india produced 871, consumed 698.8.
Canada was produced 618.9, comsumed 499.9. france produced 561.2 and commsumed 462.9, while brazil produced 530.7 and consumed 455.8, germany was produced 526.6, and consumed 582.5 and korea, Rep produced 485.1 and consumed 449.5.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word length requirement of 150 words, containing only 107 words in total (with 13 words copied directly from the prompt discounted). The writer attempts to summarize the information by mentioning the top countries, but the response remains minimal and superficial. The overview is overly simplistic, stating that China is the highest and Germany and Korea are the lowest, and the rest of the text descends into a mechanical, unstructured listing of individual figures without meaningful selection, synthesis, or comparison. Key features such as the massive gap between the top two countries (China and the US) and the rest are barely explored, resulting in a response that addresses the task only minimally.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The information and ideas are not arranged coherently, and the response lacks a clear overall progression. The text is poorly structured, featuring an abrupt two-sentence introduction followed by a jumbled paragraph of erratic lists and fragmented sentences. Paragraphing is highly inadequate, with nearly the entire body of data crammed into a single block of text. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, leading to a choppy and repetitive reading experience. For instance, transitional phrases or logical connectors between sentences are missing, making the progression jump randomly from country to country without guiding the reader smoothly through the visual data.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on direct lifting or awkward phrasing from the prompt. The student repeatedly uses simple verbs and phrases such as 'produced' and 'consumed' alongside severe word-form and spelling errors like 'comsumption', 'comsumed', and 'commsumed'. In addition, superlative forms are severely mangled with expressions like 'most highest production'. The range of vocabulary is limited and inadequate for an academic task, showing little ability to vary language or use less common lexical items effectively. These noticeable errors and repetitive patterns frequently strain the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting almost entirely of repetitive, simplistic sentence patterns like '[Country] produced [number] and consumed [number]'. Attempts at more complex structures or passive forms result in frequent, severe errors, such as 'China was produced comsumption' and 'germany was produced'. Punctuation and capitalization are poorly controlled, with lowercase letters beginning sentences ('overall,china', 'russia produced') and erratic comma splices. Errors in subject-verb agreement and voice are frequent throughout the response, causing considerable difficulty for the reader and distorting the intended meaning.
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