Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Hii Today we are discussing about this image where we can see the production and consumption of electricity in 2014 and summarize the information based on this image

The No.1 rank is china because china produced electricity in 2014 is 5398 kWh and consume 5322 kWh if can analyze this data so china is no.1 and 2nd is United States is produce electricity in 2014 is 4099 kWh and consume 3866 kWh and united states is on 2nd position about production and consumption of electricity in 2014. The 3rd number is Russia is produced 1057 kWh and consume 1038 kWh electricity in 2014 and number 4th is Japan is produced the electricity in 2014 is 936.2 kWh and consume in same year 856.7 kWh after this the 5th number is India is produced electricity 871 kWh and consume 698.8 kWh in 2014 then we can see on the 6th number is canada is produced 618.9 kWh and consume 499.9 kWh after 6th is france is produced 561.2 kWh and consume 462.9 kWh its on 7th position in chart then on 8th number is brazil is produced 530.7 kWh and 455.8 Kwh is consumed by brazil in 2014 inn this chart on the position on 9th is germany is produced 526.6 kWh and consume 582.2 kWh electricity in 2014 and in last is korea,Rep. is produced 485.1 kWh and consumed 449.5 kWh

this is the full summarize of this image in this summarize we can se the 1st and 10th position of all country and understand the chart

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses the task only minimally, as the writer attempts to list almost every data point from the chart in a mechanical fashion rather than selecting and reporting main features or making meaningful comparisons. For instance, the text reads like a repetitive list: 'The No.1 rank is china because china produced... and consume... and 2nd is United States is produce... and consume...'. There is no clear overview of the overall trends or major differences between production and consumption across the top nations. Instead of summarizing the data effectively, the writer relies on a crude sequence of individual figures, leading to a minimal response that lacks proper development of main features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text lacks clear overall progression and is essentially written as one giant, continuous run-on sentence separated only by commas and lowercase letters. Information and ideas are not arranged coherently into paragraphs, with the body of the text forming a single undifferentiated block. While the writer attempts to sequence the data using ordinal numbers like 'The No.1 rank', '2nd', '3rd number', and '5th number', referencing is faulty and cohesive devices are inadequate to structure the response properly. There is no introduction, body, or conclusion with appropriate paragraph breaks, making the overall organization difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Vocabulary use is basic and repetitive throughout the response. The writer relies heavily on simple, functional verbs such as 'produced' and 'consume', repeating them constantly for every single country without variation (e.g., 'is produced 561.2 kWh and consume 462.9 kWh'). There are also occasional word-choice and word-form errors, such as using 'consume' where the past tense 'consumed' is needed, or writing 'Kwh' with an incorrect capital letter. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic numerical data, but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher levels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response features a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting almost entirely of a massive string of clauses linked by coordinating conjunctions and commas without proper terminal punctuation. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding verb forms, run-on sentences, and lack of subject-verb agreement or proper auxiliary usage, such as in 'china produced electricity in 2014 is 5398' and 'United States is produce electricity'. Punctuation is virtually absent except for commas, resulting in frequent errors that cause difficulty for the reader and distort the flow of meaning.

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