Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart below shows the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Here, they have shown 10 countries data. By looking the bar chart, China has produced and consumed the most electricity.

In ranking, China came first by doing both high from the other native countires. On second, US will come as it has produced more and consumed less. Moreover, Russia had produced and consumed eaqually, as there is only a minor difference.

Furthermore, when we see Germany, it has consumed more than produced. The other 7 countires chart has shown us that they have produced more and they have consumed less. But these have only minor difference in them.

Now, when we talks about China, it has produced more and the consumption rate is less. Last but not least, Korea is the only country that has produced the minimum electricity and the consumption and producion rates goes hand in hand.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the main leaders, note that Germany is the exception where consumption exceeds production, and recognise Korea as the lowest producer. However, the response is only 144 words, below the required 150, and the overview is incomplete: it does not clearly compare the very large gap between China and the other countries or summarise the general pattern with accurate qualifications. The claim that Russia’s figures are “equally” high is imprecise, and saying the other seven countries all have only a “minor difference” overlooks India’s and Canada’s more noticeable gaps. Some details are repeated, especially China’s lead, while key comparisons are not developed. Add a concise overview and support it with accurate, selected figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from the leading countries to Germany and then Korea, and paragraph breaks help separate some points. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “Last but not least” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is not consistently clear: China’s figures are discussed twice, and the final paragraph returns to a point already made rather than adding a new comparison. References such as “these” in “these have only minor difference” are unclear, and the repeated “Now” and “when we see” constructions make the organisation feel mechanical. Group the overview and comparisons more deliberately, and use clear references to countries or data groups.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “ranking,” and “minor difference,” so the reader can generally understand the topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “doing both high,” “other native countires,” and “rates goes hand in hand.” Spelling errors, including “eaqually,” “countires,” and “producion,” are noticeable and reduce precision. Repetition of “produced” and “consumed” also limits variety. Aim for accurate, natural chart language such as “generated,” “used,” “ranked first,” and “exceeded,” while checking spelling and choosing phrases that describe the data precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a clause beginning “as there is only a minor difference,” and most of the intended meaning remains understandable. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction and agreement. For example, “By looking the bar chart” is missing a required preposition, “10 countries data” has an incorrect noun structure, and “when we talks” has subject–verb disagreement. In “the consumption and producion rates goes,” the plural subject does not agree with “goes.” Tense and phrasing are also inconsistent in “US will come” when describing past data. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and check articles, prepositions, and subject–verb agreement.

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