Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar card illustrates the most high ranking countries in 2014 for production and consumption of electricity.

By comparing the given data, it can be observed that the most produce electricity in 2014 is China it create 5,398 billion kWh and it's consumption is 5,322 bollion kWh. If we talk about the second most electricity generated in 2014 is United states it generate 4,099 billion kWh and the consumption is 3,866 billion kWh.The third name of the country on the ranking list is Russia the electricity production of this country is 1,057kWh and comsumption of electricity in 2014 is 1,038billion kWh.in 2014 Japan change a lot the production of electricity in Japan is 936.2 billion kWh and consumption is 856.7 billion kwh. As we can see, india is also on the list after Japan the production of Indian electricity is 871 billion kWh and consumption is 698.8 billion kWh. Therefore, the lower countries which is below than 600 billion kWh are France, Brazil, Germsny snd Korea..

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two measures and report several accurate figures for China, the United States, Russia, Japan and India. However, the response only partially summarises the chart: it has no clear overview of the main pattern, such as the large lead of China and the United States over the other countries, and it omits Canada. The final statement groups France, Brazil, Germany and Korea as countries below 600 billion kWh, but does not clarify whether this refers to production or consumption; Germany’s consumption is also above 600. Some figures are presented without the correct unit, as in Russia’s production. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview first, compare the main highs and lows, and report the lower-ranked countries accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a broadly understandable order, moving from China and the United States through the next-ranked countries and ending with a group of lower producers. Phrases such as “By comparing the given data” and “As we can see” attempt to guide the reader. However, the information is presented as one long paragraph, with little separation between the overview and supporting details, and the repeated country-by-country pattern limits progression. Some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “Therefore” before the final grouping, which does not express a clear result. Use a separate overview and detail paragraphs, and organise comparisons into meaningful groups rather than listing countries in sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “ranking list” and “generated,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spelling errors reduce precision: “bar card,” “most high ranking,” “most produce,” “change a lot,” “comsumption,” “bollion” and “Germsny.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “the third name of the country on the ranking list.” Aim for accurate, conventional language for describing data, and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “highest,” “ranked third,” “output” and “approximately” would help you describe comparisons without relying on repetitive or awkward wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, and the reader can usually understand the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited, and errors recur in sentence construction and agreement. For example, “the most produce electricity … is China it create” joins clauses without suitable punctuation and uses an incorrect verb form; “the lower countries which is” has faulty agreement. Several sentences run together, including the transition from the United States to Russia, and capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent. Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences, using past-tense reporting consistently, and separating independent clauses with full stops. These changes would make your data descriptions easier to follow.

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