Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illestrates the top ten sates utilization and manufacturing of electricity in 2014. Overall, all of these nations useage and making of electricty ratio is same but some countries production is ten times more than last one, point is note able if manufacturing more then consumption is also higher.

In 2014 China was maked more five thousend billion kWh on other hand utilizaers were used alsoe more than five thousend billion kWh , United States was on second number with 4,099 billion kWh produce moreover useres were near to it. You maybe notice that Russia largest country was only maked one thousend billion kWh and usears were also on same page

Othere all countries useage and prouction were produce less than 950 billion kWh, Japan and India waere somehow equeal as well as Canada, France and Brazil were on same page they all produced more than 500 billion kWh however utilizarers were utilizaed less than 500 billion kWh. Germany produce less than usage, korea produced same values.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s broad subject and include several relevant comparisons, especially China and the United States leading by a large margin, Russia producing and consuming around 1,000 billion kWh, and Germany consuming more than it produces. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: “all of these nations useage and making ... ratio is same” does not reflect the data, and production is not consistently higher than consumption because Germany is the exception. Some comparisons are also imprecise: Japan and India are not “somehow equeal,” and the claim that Canada, France and Brazil all produced more than 500 is true, but their consumption figures are not all below 500 only in a broad sense. Select the main patterns accurately and support them with clearer figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an opening overview followed by two paragraphs of country comparisons. This gives the reader some organisation, and connectors such as “Overall,” “on other hand,” and “however” show an attempt to link ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because several comparisons are grouped vaguely, as in “Japan and India ... as well as Canada, France and Brazil were on same page.” References such as “it,” “same page,” and “last one” are not sufficiently clear, while “Othere all countries” does not establish a clear transition. Organise the body by meaningful groups—such as the two leading countries, the middle-ranking countries, and Germany—and use precise links between each comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the chart, including “production,” “consumption,” “billion kWh,” and “Overall,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and many word choices, forms, and spellings make the account difficult to read: “utilization and manufacturing” is an awkward substitute for consumption and production, while “useage,” “illestrates,” “maked,” and “utilizaers” are inaccurate. Phrases such as “on same page” are informal and do not clearly describe similar figures. Use standard chart language consistently, for example “generated,” “consumed,” “stood at,” and “approximately,” and check spelling and word forms. More precise vocabulary would also help distinguish a small difference from genuinely similar values.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You use some longer sentence attempts, including “Overall, all of these nations...” and the sentence beginning “Canada, France and Brazil...,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and agreement appear in forms such as “all of these nations ... ratio is same,” “Japan and India waere somehow equeal,” and “Germany produce less than usage.” Verb forms are also unreliable: “was maked” and “were used” do not express the intended comparisons accurately. Several sentences run together or lack clear punctuation, which makes relationships between ideas harder to understand. Practise building accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “while” or “whereas”; check subject–verb agreement, past-tense forms, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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