Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart represents the statistical data of ten countries, where they are representing the ranks in production and consumption of electricity.

Among them all, the China is the main producer with 5.398 kilowatt per hour (kWh) and also the topmost consumer with more than five billion kWh electricity. The second country consumes and produces after china is the United States (US), with estimated data of more than four billion and expends 3.866 billion kWh approximately.

Although, The least power producing nation is Korea Republic, which generates 485.1 billion kWh, also becoming the least consumer with 449.5 billion kWh. Albeit, Russia produces 1.057 billion kWh, which is almost similar in generation and consumption of electricity, having little marginal difference. Furthermore, Germany is the only country which consumes more than its production. It produces 526.6 billion kWh only, but consumes 582.5 billion kWh. Additionally, other country such as Japan, India, Canada, France,Brazil, Germany, and Korea Republic produces and uses less than China, US and Russia.

Overall, the China, US and Russia are the three topmost producers and consumers of electricity respectively, and Korea Republic is at the downmost position among all ten nations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important features accurately: China and the United States lead both measures, Korea is lowest, and Germany is the only country where consumption exceeds production. The Russia comparison is also relevant. However, some figures are reported with incorrect units or scale: China’s production is 5,398 billion kWh, not “5.398 kilowatt per hour,” and Russia’s figure is 1,057 billion kWh, not “1.057 billion.” The overview is present but broad, and the response gives little detail about the middle-ranked countries or the substantial gap between the top two and the rest. Develop the comparisons more precisely and ensure figures and units match the chart to make the summary more complete and clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to selected country comparisons and then an overall statement. Grouping China and the US, followed by the lowest-ranked country and Germany’s exception, gives the reader some useful organisation. However, progression is not always smooth: “Although” and “Albeit” are used awkwardly to begin points, and “Additionally” introduces a broad list that repeats earlier information rather than advancing the comparison. The final overview also repeats the ranking already stated. Use clearer paragraphing and organise the body around the main patterns—for example, the leading countries, the lower group, and Germany’s exception. More precise referencing would also help readers follow which figures are being compared.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of task-related vocabulary, including “producer,” “consumer,” “generates,” “consumes,” and “marginal difference.” This shows an effort to describe both measures and compare them. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “statistical data,” “topmost,” “downmost position,” and “expends” for electricity consumption. “Kilowatt per hour” is also not the correct way to express the chart’s unit, and “the China” is an awkward country-name construction. These choices sometimes make the description less precise, even though the general meaning is usually recoverable. Prefer standard chart language such as “produced,” “consumed,” “ranked lowest,” and “a small difference,” and use the unit consistently as “billion kWh.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple statements and some longer structures, including the contrast beginning “Although” and the sentence about Germany consuming more than it produces. Meaning is generally understandable, but errors in sentence construction and punctuation are noticeable. For example, “where they are representing the ranks” is an awkward relative clause, while “Although, The least power producing nation…” is not a complete, correctly punctuated construction. There are also article and agreement problems in “the China” and “other country … produces and uses.” Capitalisation is inconsistent, as in “The” after a comma and “china” later in the response. Practise complete clauses, accurate connectors, and consistent subject–verb agreement to make the range of structures more controlled.

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