Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrates the production and consumption of electricity by 10 different countries in 2014

An overall Analysis depicts that the most amount of electricity produced was by china around 5398 billion kwh and lowest amount was by korea republic around 485.1 billion kwh and electricity consumed the most was also by china which was 5332 billion kwh and lowest amount of electricity was by korea republic around 449.5 billion kwh

The 5 countries that consumed and produced most amount of electricity are China, USA, Russia, Japan, India. China almost produced 5938 billion kwh and consumed around 5332 billion kwh electricty wheras Usa production was around 4099 and consumption was 3866 billion kwh. Russia also has huge production with the numbers of 1057 and consumption of 1038 billion kwh.Howevere production of Japan was 936.2 billion kwh but consumption was 856.7 billion kwh. India prodution is also huge with 871 in numbers but consumption is very less as compared to other countries which is 698.8.

Canada production was 618.9 and consumption was 499.9 billion kwh wheras france produced aroun 561.2 billion kwh electricity and consumed around 462.9. Brazil production is around 530.7 but consumption is less around 455.8 billion kwh. But this senario is not same for germany because of less production which wwas 526.6 and consumption was 582.5 billion kwh. Korea Republic production is least of all the 10 countries mentioned in the graph around 485.1 and consumpton is around 449.5 billion kwh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main extremes accurately: China leads both production and consumption, while Korea has the lowest figures, and you report many country values. The country-by-country coverage also includes the notable exception of Germany, where consumption (582.5) exceeds production (526.6). However, the overview is mostly a list of highest and lowest figures rather than a concise summary of the chart’s main patterns, such as the large gap between the top two countries and the much lower figures for the remaining countries. There is also a factual slip: China’s production is given once as 5,938, although the chart shows 5,398. Develop the overview and check figures carefully to make the report more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs covering the higher- and lower-ranked countries. This helps the reader locate information, and comparisons such as “whereas” and “but” show an attempt to connect data. However, the progression is largely a sequence of country-by-country statements, with repeated reporting of production and consumption rather than grouping countries by meaningful patterns. Some links are awkward or unclear, as in “But this senario is not same for germany,” and punctuation is missing after “billion kwh” before “Howevere.” Organise the details into clearer comparison groups and use linking expressions accurately and selectively.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “produced,” and “consumed,” so the basic meaning is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “most amount,” “huge,” and “very less.” Some word choices do not fit formal chart description naturally, including “numbers of 1057” and “this senario.” Spelling errors such as “electricty,” “wheras,” “prodution,” and “consumpton” are noticeable and reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of comparison terms—such as “highest,” “lowest,” “exceeded,” and “approximately”—and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate the basic comparisons using simple clauses and some longer sentences joined with “whereas,” “but,” and “because.” However, sentence structures are limited, and errors recur in articles, agreement, verb forms, and punctuation. For example, “the most amount of electricity produced was by china” is an awkwardly formed passive construction, while “India prodution is also huge” lacks a correctly formed subject and verb. The opening sentence also needs a full stop, and several sentences run together, such as the transition from Russia to Japan. Practise accurate comparative sentence patterns, for example, “China produced more electricity than any other country,” and punctuate each sentence clearly.

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