Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chat illustrate the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Overall, it is clear that two countries used electricity is very higher this is china and united states. Its the campare for other used electricity is lower it is india germany and korea rep. China is very larger countery for produce the electricity for the other countery and user is very higher. China produce electricity is high more about 5398 billion kwh and consumption is more than same its 5322 billion kwh for the other side united states is secound number produce and used electricity more than 4099 million kwh produce and used is 3866 million kwh russia is third its produce is 1057 billion and used is 10388 million kwh. Its campare the other is very percentage used electricity brazil and germany produce and used is same. Canada produce 618.9 million kwh and used is 499.9 million kwh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s topic and make a basic overall comparison by noting that China and the United States are the largest producers and consumers. You also include several figures, such as China’s production and consumption and Canada’s production. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main pattern across the countries. Some data are misreported: Russia’s consumption is 1,038 billion kWh, not 10,388 million, and the United States’ figures are given in million rather than billion kWh. The claim that Brazil and Germany have similar production and consumption is also misleading, especially for Germany, where consumption exceeds production. The response is 143 words, below the 150-word minimum; 13 words copied from the prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and an overall statement before moving to country figures. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “for the other side,” and “Canada” show an effort to connect information. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the discussion jumps between general claims and individual countries without a consistent order. Several references are difficult to follow, as in “Its campare the other is very percentage used electricity.” Group the overview separately, then compare the leading countries and the remaining figures in a logical sequence. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise links between comparisons would make the progression easier to understand.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “billion kWh,” and “overall,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors strain understanding. Examples include “bar chat,” “campare,” “secound,” and “countery.” Phrases such as “used electricity is very higher” and “produce electricity is high more” are not natural ways to describe the data. Use accurate terms for comparisons and quantities, and check spelling of country names and key task vocabulary. More precise expressions would help you report the chart without relying repeatedly on “higher,” “lower,” and “same.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences and use a few basic structures, including “Overall, it is clear that…” and comparisons between production and consumption. However, sentence structure is very limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes making the intended meaning difficult to recover. For example, “two countries used electricity is very higher” combines incompatible verb patterns, while “China produce electricity is high more” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Articles and plural forms are also often missing or inaccurate, and several clauses run together without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then connect them with controlled clauses such as “while” or “whereas.”

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