Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illusrate the top rank countires for the generate and usage of electricity in 2014.

Overall,the bar chat tells us the top ranking countries for the gerenrate and use the electricity there are ten countries that are shown in bar chart.

Usually China was the first country which generate more electricity than others its generates approxmaitely 5398 and usage 5322 total.united states generates 4099 and usage 3866.Russia generates 1057 and its usage1038.Japan produce 936.2 and usage 856.7.India generates 871 and usage 698.8 and canada generates 618.9 and usage 499.9.France 561.2 and consume 462.9. Brazil generates 530.7 and consume 455.8 and Germany generates 526.6 usage 582.5 and Korea , Rep generates 485.1 and release 449.5.

Mostly,the comparisons in others china is the largest electricty produce country in the world but others countries consume or gerenrates less electricity as compared to china.China mostly use electricity for making products and electrical experiment perform with the help of electricity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report figures for all ten countries, including the main leaders, China and the United States. Most figures are consistent with the chart, and you correctly note Germany as an exception where consumption exceeds production. However, the response is largely a list of numbers rather than a clear summary of the main features. The overview repeats that China ranks first but does not clearly compare the broad pattern: production is generally higher than consumption, while China and the US are far ahead of the remaining countries. The final claim about China using electricity for manufacturing and experiments is not shown by the chart. Focus on supported comparisons and avoid adding explanations the data cannot establish.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, an overview, a country-by-country account, and a concluding comparison. This gives the reader some sense of the information’s order. However, the progression is weak because most of the body is one long run of figures, with few clear groupings or transitions. Phrases such as “Usually” and “Mostly” do not clearly signal the relationship between ideas, and the final comments repeat the point that China is largest before introducing unsupported detail. Organise the data into meaningful comparisons—for example, the two leading producers, the middle-ranking countries, and Germany’s exception—and use clear linking language to show how each group relates to the overview.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant terms, including “production,” “usage,” “consume,” and “comparisons,” and the country names and figures are generally understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise: “generate and usage” and “produce country” do not express the chart categories naturally, while “release” is not an appropriate description of electricity consumption. Several spelling errors, including “illusrate,” “countires,” and “electricty,” also reduce accuracy. The phrase “electrical experiment perform” is unclear and introduces an idea not represented in the chart. Build a more reliable set of chart-description expressions, such as “generated,” “consumed,” “output,” and “the highest figure,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates many basic facts through simple clauses, but grammatical control is inconsistent and sentence structures are very limited. Errors include subject–verb agreement in “The bar chart illustrate” and “its generates,” missing or misplaced articles in “shown in bar chart,” and incomplete constructions such as “France 561.2 and consume 462.9.” Several figures are joined into long sentences without reliable punctuation, as in the sequence beginning “Usually China was the first country.” This makes relationships between the data harder to follow. Practise forming complete comparative sentences with accurate subjects and verbs—for example, “China generated more electricity than any other country”—and separate each comparison with appropriate punctuation.

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