Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart beneath illustrates the production and consumption of electricity in the ten highest ranking countries in 2014.

Overall, China and the United States had higher level of electricity production and consumption than all other countries. Germany and Korea had lower levels of electricity production and usage.

In 2014, China and United States of electricity had upper levels than 8 countries. In China power production stood at 5,398 and consumption was 5,322. In the United States production increased than consumption. In the Russia showed almost same figure consumption declined just 19 from production. In India

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview by noting that China and the United States lead in both production and consumption. You also report China’s figures accurately and recognise that Russia’s two values are close. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it stops partway through “In India” and leaves most countries and comparisons unreported. The claim that Germany and Korea had the lowest levels is only partly accurate, since Germany’s consumption (582.5) exceeds that of several countries. The response is also 96 words, below the required 150, which leaves the main features substantially underdeveloped. To improve, complete the account and compare the major figures, including the notable German exception.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then some country-specific details. This gives the reader a starting point, and the references to China, the United States and Russia broadly follow a sensible order. However, progression is weak because the final paragraph ends abruptly at “In India,” and there is no developed grouping or conclusion to complete the comparisons. Linking is also limited, with repeated sentence openings such as “In China” and “In the United States.” Plan the response in clear overview and detail paragraphs, group countries by their figures, and use accurate transitions such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile” to show relationships between comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses enough basic topic vocabulary to communicate its general subject, including “production,” “consumption,” “levels” and “figure.” Some variation is attempted through “power” and “usage,” although these choices are not always precise or natural in this context. Several phrases are awkward, such as “had upper levels” and “production increased than consumption,” and “highest ranking countries” is less suitable than a direct description of the countries with the highest figures. The vocabulary remains limited and repetitive, which makes some comparisons difficult to interpret. Build a bank of accurate chart language, especially verbs and comparison phrases, and check that each collocation fits the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You produce several understandable simple sentences and use the past tense appropriately in places, for example, “China power production stood at 5,398.” However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors frequently affect clarity. In “China and United States of electricity had upper levels,” the word order and article use make the relationship between the countries and figures unclear. “In the Russia showed almost same figure” also has faulty sentence structure and missing articles, while “consumption declined just 19 from production” does not form a clear grammatical comparison. The unfinished “In India” further interrupts the sentence sequence. Practise complete comparative sentences, checking articles, subject–verb structure and the grammatical form after comparison words.

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