Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The bar charts compares the top ten nations in terms of electricity production and consumption in 2014, measured in billion kilowatt hours.
Overall, China and the United States were by far th largest producers and consumers of electricity. Additionally, almost all nations generated more power than they used, with germany being the ole exceotion.
China ranked first, producing 5,398 billion KWh and consuming 5,322 billion KWh. The United States followed in second place, with output reaching 4,09 billion KWh and usage at 3,866 billionKWh. Both figures for China and US were significant higher than those of the remaining eight countres.
Amoung the remaining nations, Russia produces1,057 billion KWh and consumed 1,038 billion KWh, while figures for Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil and South Korea ranged between 485 billion KWh and 936 billion KWh for generqtion, and between 449 billion KWh and 857 billion KWh for consumption. Notably, Germany generated 526.6 billion KWh but consumed a higher amount of 582.5 billion KWh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The response identifies the main pattern accurately: China and the United States dominate both measures, and Germany is the only country where consumption exceeds production. It also includes several relevant figures, including the leading countries and Germany’s reversal, so the key features are clear. The comparison that the two leaders are “significant higher” than the other countries is relevant, though the remaining data are compressed into broad ranges rather than developed through selected comparisons. The range for production and consumption among the other countries is broadly accurate, but it obscures distinctions such as India’s relatively high output and Germany’s unusual position. This covers the task well overall; more precise selection and development of secondary comparisons would make the report more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0
The organisation is clear and effective: an introduction is followed by an overview, then a paragraph on the two leading countries and one on the remaining nations. This gives the reader a logical progression from the largest figures to the smaller ones. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Additionally,” “while,” and “Notably” help signal the relationships between points, and the contrast involving Germany is easy to follow. Some information in the final paragraph is densely grouped into a long sentence listing six countries, which makes the comparison less easy to process. Separating that range from the Russia comparison, or grouping countries more selectively, would improve flow. Overall, cohesion is handled flexibly, with only minor opportunities to make the progression smoother.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The response uses relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “output,” “usage,” “ranked first,” and “followed in second place.” These choices make the comparisons understandable, and “generated more power than they used” conveys the overview clearly. However, spelling errors are noticeable, including “th,” “ole exceotion,” “countres,” and “Amoung,” and there are inaccurate or awkward forms such as “significant higher” and “figures … ranged … for generqtion.” “KWh” is also inconsistently formatted, and “kilowatt hours” would be a clearer standard form. The range is adequate for describing the chart, but errors and imprecise collocations limit control. Proofreading and more precise comparison language would strengthen this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
There is a useful mix of sentence forms, including the overview’s compound statement and the contrast in “Notably, Germany generated … but consumed a higher amount.” Most relationships between figures remain understandable. However, some grammatical errors recur: “The bar charts compares” has subject–verb disagreement, “Russia produces … and consumed” shifts tense, and “Both figures … were significant higher” uses an incorrect adverb form. The sentence beginning “Amoung the remaining nations” also lacks a space in “produces1,057,” and the long list structure is difficult to control. These errors do not generally prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy and show that complex comparisons are not consistently controlled. Check agreement, maintain past tense for 2014 data, and review sentence boundaries and punctuation.
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