Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar char illustrates the electricity production and consumption of top ten countries.

Overall, it is clear that China had the highest production and consumption of electricity, followed by the United States. Furthermore, every country produced more electricity then consumed but Germany followed the opposite trend.

China produced 5,398 billion kwh electricity, whereas consumed 5,322 billion kwh electricity. The production of electricity of the United states recorded at 4,099 billion kwh and electricity consumption was 3,866 billion kwh. Additionally, Russia produced and consumed almost same amount of electricity.

Among the remaining countries Japan produced 936.2 billion kwh of electricity, while consumed 856.7 billion kwh. Moreover, India stood at 871 billion kwh in the production of electricity and consumed 698.8 billion kwh. Canada and France produced more electricity more than consumed. In addition, Germany consumed 582.5 billion kwh of electricity and produced 526.6 billion kwh. South Korea and Brazil recorded comparatively lower figures than the leading countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: China and the United States lead both measures, and Germany is the exception to the general pattern of production exceeding consumption. Several figures are also reported correctly, including those for China, the United States, Japan, India and Germany. However, some features are only briefly covered: Russia is described as producing and consuming “almost same amount” without figures, and Canada, France, Brazil and South Korea are grouped or mentioned without useful comparisons. The overview could also make the large gap between the top two countries and the rest more explicit. Develop the lower-ranked comparisons and include key figures, such as Russia’s 1,057 versus 1,038, to make the summary more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs that move from the leading countries to other producers. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” “Additionally” and “Moreover” help signal relationships, and the reader can follow the comparisons. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some of the flexibility associated with stronger cohesion. However, several transitions feel formulaic, and the final paragraph combines countries without a clear comparison: “Canada and France…” is followed by Germany, then South Korea and Brazil. Group countries by similar patterns or output levels, and use more precise references to connect each sentence to the previous one. This would make the progression more deliberate.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “highest,” “followed by,” and “comparatively lower figures.” These terms make the chart’s main comparisons understandable, and you attempt some variation rather than repeating one verb throughout. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “bar char,” “recorded at,” and “produced more electricity more than consumed.” Capitalisation and unit formatting are also inconsistent (“United states,” “kwh”). Choose standard chart-reporting phrases and use them consistently; for example, say that a figure “stood at” a value or that production “exceeded” consumption. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish the countries’ patterns.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple statements and more complex comparisons, including clauses with “whereas,” “while” and “but.” Most meanings remain clear, and the sentence comparing Germany with the general trend is effective. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in sentence construction and comparison patterns. For example, “whereas consumed 5,322” lacks a subject, and “almost same amount” needs an article and a clearer construction, such as “almost the same amount.” The phrase “Canada and France produced more electricity more than consumed” also has an incomplete comparison structure. Check that each clause has a subject and verb, and use parallel forms when comparing production with consumption. This will improve accuracy while preserving your range of sentence types.

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