Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar chart provides information about top ten nations for consumption and production of the electricity during 2014.

Overall,it can be seen that the China was highest in both whereas Korea,Rep. was lowest in both for the production and consumption of electricity during 2014.On the otherhand Germany only one country who consumtion electicity more then the production whereas others country only high in production electicity.

firstly,China and America both were produce electricity and consumption higher then other country China produce up to 5,398 consumption up to 5,388. U.S. production and consumption 4,099 and 3,866 respectively.Russia produce elctricity to 1,057 and consumption minor only up to 1,038.Moreover, Japan production and consumption of electricity upto 936,2 and 856,7 respectively, India Production and consumption of electricity 871 and 698,8 respectively.

While, In Canada Produced and consumtion of the electicity up to 618,9 and 499,9. France produced 561,2 billion kwh Whereas consumption of electricity to 462,9 billion kwh in 2014.Brazil produced 530,7billion kwh and consumption electricity to 455.8 billion kwh in 2014.However, In Germany production of electricity up to 526.6 billion kwh and consumption of electricity up to 582.5 billion kwh during 2014. Korea, Rep. was the lowest country in electricity proiduction and consumption 485.1 billion kwh and 449.5 billion kwh respectively duing 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: China leads both measures, Korea is lowest, and Germany is the exception where consumption exceeds production. You also include figures for all ten countries, which gives the report relevant coverage. However, the overview is brief and the comparisons are mostly presented as a country-by-country list rather than highlighting the major contrasts, such as the large gap between China and the United States and the much lower figures for the remaining countries. There is also a factual error: China’s consumption is 5,322 billion kWh, not 5,388. To strengthen the response, check figures carefully and group the data around the most significant comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two body paragraphs. The grouping of the first five countries and then the remaining countries helps the reader follow the coverage. However, progression within the paragraphs is largely a sequence of separate country figures, so comparisons between countries are limited. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “While,” and “However” are used, but some do not clearly express the relationship between the information that follows. Punctuation and spacing also interrupt the flow, for example “Overall,it” and “While, In Canada”. Organise the body around meaningful comparisons and use transitions only where they clarify a contrast or addition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “respectively,” and “billion kwh,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling and collocation errors make parts of the report less natural, such as “produce electricity and consumption higher,” “consumtion electicity,” and “the lowest country in electricity proiduction.” Repetition of “up to” also makes the descriptions imprecise; it is not the best way to report chart values. Use accurate forms such as “generated” and “consumed,” and vary reporting verbs while keeping the wording straightforward. Check spelling and use the standard unit form, “billion kWh.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “whereas” and a relative clause in the overview. However, errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to interpret. For example, “China and America both were produce” has an incorrect verb form, while “Germany only one country who…” is missing a verb and uses an unsuitable clause structure. Articles and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “the China was highest” and “others country.” Many data statements are fragments or lack a clear subject–verb structure. Practise building complete sentences with a consistent past-tense reporting verb, and check articles, plurals and punctuation before submitting.

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