Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chart illustrate the the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.The chart compares different categories and presents the data in numbers or percentages.Overall,It can be seen that there are noticeable difference among categories shown in the chart,China appear to be the highest,While korea are the oppositeof it.In addition,Show some categories by the following increment as well as decrement whereas for some cases they remain stable.According to the chart,The first main country china whose rank 1 and electricity production was 5,398 and cosumption was 5,322.The second country rank was 2 the united states his electricity production was 4,099 and consumption was 3,866.Third country russia his rank 3 and his electricity production was 1,057 and consumption 1,038.Japan has ranked 4rth and electricity production was 936.2 and consumption was 856.7.The nuber fifth rank was india his electricity production was 871 and consumption was 698.8.This is the followed by more information the canada rank was 6 and his electricity production was 618.9 and consumption 499.9.France ranked 7th and his electricity production was 561.2 and consumption 462.9.Brazil electricity production was 530.7 and consumption was 455.8.sermany electricity production was 526.6 and consumption was 582.5.And they remaning informations number 10th korea electricity production was 485.1 and consumption was 499.5.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You include figures for all ten countries, and most of the production and consumption values you report match the chart. However, the response mainly lists data rather than selecting and summarising the key features. The overview is vague: “noticeable difference among categories” and “increment as well as decrement” do not identify the main pattern that China and the United States greatly exceed the other countries. There are also factual errors: Korea’s consumption is 449.5, not 499.5, and Germany is the only listed country whose consumption (582.5) exceeds production (526.6), a notable comparison that is not explained. The claim that Korea is the opposite of China is unclear. A more precise overview and accurate emphasis on these contrasts would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows the chart’s country ranking, so readers can generally trace the information from China through Korea. However, it is presented as one long paragraph, with little separation between the overview and the detailed figures. Linking phrases such as “This is the followed by more information” and “And they remaning informations” do not create clear relationships between ideas, while repeated “and” makes the report feel like a list. The overview also shifts abruptly into country-by-country details. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and grouped comparisons, and connect related figures with clear transitions—for example, contrast the two leading countries with the much lower values for the remaining countries.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “rank,” and “electricity,” and the repeated terms make the subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several choices or spelling errors reduce clarity: “categories” is not an accurate description of the countries, “stable” does not clearly describe the data, and “cosumption,” “nuber,” and “sermany” are misspelled. Phrases such as “the opposite of it” and “the following increment as well as decrement” are awkward and imprecise. Aim for standard chart language such as “figures,” “higher than,” “declined,” and “exceeded,” and check country names and key terms carefully. More precise comparisons would also reduce repetitive wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including “Overall, it can be seen that…” and the repeated clauses comparing production with consumption. However, sentence control is weak: many clauses are joined without clear punctuation, and agreement and verb forms are often inaccurate. For example, “The given bar chart illustrate” needs a singular verb, while “China appear to be the highest” also has incorrect agreement. Several country descriptions are fragments or incomplete constructions, such as “Third country russia his rank 3,” and the final sentence begins with “And” without a clear grammatical connection. Use complete sentences with a consistent pattern, such as “China produced 5,398 billion kWh and consumed 5,322 billion kWh,” and check capitalization and punctuation.

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