Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chat elucidates information about Rank country and electricity . The chart compares different categories and present the data in number or percentage . Overall it is clear that there are noticeable differences among the categories shown in the chart . Its show the electricity rank in the chart . In addition some categories show some fluctuations by foolowing increment as well as decrement whereas for some cases thry remain stable . According to the chart the first city is China this electricity is 5398 production billion kWh and the 5322 Consumption billion kWh . The second country is United States that electricity is 4099 production and 3866 Consumption The next country is Russia that electricity production is 1057 and Consumption is 1038 and the next country is Japan that electricity production is 9936.2 and consumption is 856.7 and the next country is india that electricity production is only 871 and consumption is 698 and the next country is Canada that electricty production is 618.9 and consumption is 499.9 . This show a clear comparison among the categories .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report several figures for China, the United States, Russia, Japan, India and Canada, so some relevant information is included. However, the response only partially summarises the chart: it gives no meaningful overview of the main pattern, omits the remaining countries, and does not compare production and consumption across the full set. The claim that categories “remain stable” or show “fluctuations” is not a useful description of this one-year comparison. There is also a significant data error: Japan’s production is written as 9,936.2 rather than 936.2. To make the report more complete, state that China and the US lead by a wide margin, then select accurate comparisons, including Germany as the only country where consumption exceeds production.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, a general statement, and then country-by-country details. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is being presented. However, the ideas do not develop into a clear, well-organised summary. The overview is vague, and the long final section strings together countries with repeated “the next country” phrasing, making the progression mechanical. Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, such as the United States figures followed immediately by “The next country is Russia.” Use separate paragraphs for the overview and selected comparisons, and group countries by meaningful patterns rather than simply listing them. Clearer links between the comparisons would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “categories,” and “comparison,” which helps communicate the chart’s subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the first city” for China and “this electricity is” before the figures. “Fluctuations” and “remain stable” are also unsuitable for describing differences between countries in a single year. Spelling errors such as “bar chat,” “foolowing,” “thry,” and “electricty” further reduce precision. Aim for concise chart language and accurate country terminology, for example, “China ranked first” and “production stood at.” This would make the description clearer and more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on simple sentence patterns, with repeated constructions such as “the next country is…” and “that electricity is…”. There are attempts to connect ideas, but sentence control is weak: “Overall it is clear that there are noticeable differences…” is followed by the faulty “Its show,” and “The second country is United States that electricity is…” lacks a well-formed clause. Articles and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “the first city is China” and “This show.” Punctuation is often missing between complete ideas, particularly in the country list. Practise forming accurate comparison sentences, such as “China produced 5,398 billion kWh, slightly more than it consumed,” and check articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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