Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given bar graph illustrates innformation regarding the top ten countries for the production and consumpation of electricity in 2014.

after analyzing the bar graph, it is evident that there was highest rank country in china. Almost, there was 5398 production and 5322 consumption in china and the higest electricity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies China as the leading country and gives its production and consumption figures accurately (5,398 and 5,322). However, it reports almost none of the chart’s other information: there is no comparison with the United States, no account of the much lower figures for the remaining countries, and no mention that Germany is the only country where consumption exceeds production. The overview is also unclear in “there was highest rank country in china.” The response is substantially under the required 150 words: it contains 42 words, with 8 words copied from the prompt excluded. To improve, provide a clear overview and select several key comparisons, supported by accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence: an opening sentence introduces the chart, followed by a brief comment about China. The phrase “after analyzing the bar graph” signals a move to the main observation, so the reader can see an attempt to organise the response. However, the answer is too brief to develop a clear progression, and it has no paragraphing or linking of comparisons. “Almost” does not clearly connect the following figures to the claim about China. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph comparing the main figures. Use clear links such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile” to show how the countries relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “bar graph,” “production,” “consumption,” and “electricity,” and the country name and figures make the topic recognisable. However, the range is very limited, with no vocabulary for describing comparisons, rankings, or differences. Several spelling errors—“innformation,” “consumpation,” and “higest”—also reduce accuracy. Phrases such as “highest rank country” and “the higest electricity” are not natural ways to describe the chart. Build a small range of precise expressions for reporting data, such as “generated,” “used,” “ranked first,” and “slightly exceeded,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a longer sentence with “after analyzing the bar graph, it is evident that…,” as well as a simple introductory sentence. However, the sentence structures are very limited, and the main clause “there was highest rank country in china” is not grammatically complete or natural. In “there was 5398 production and 5322 consumption,” the construction does not correctly express the figures, and the article is missing before “highest.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, including the lowercase “china” and the full stop after “2014.” Practise complete comparative sentences, for example, “China produced 5,398 billion kWh, slightly more than it consumed.”

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