Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The chart illustrates the the 10 ten countries that produced and consume the most energy in 2014. These countries are from different continents arround the world (asia , europe, america,etc).The top countries are china ,US,russia,japan,india, canada,france,brazil,germany,korea.some of these countries ussually consume more elecricity because of their population and their industries.the data is conclued in billion KWH.

China come at the top of the list with the most amount of electricity production and consumption.China produce 5398 and consume 5322.United States come on second on the list with the production of 4099 and consumption of 3866. Russia on third with 1057and 1038 repectively.Japan is considerablely a small country but it prdoduce 938.2 and consume 856.7 . India with production of 871 and 698.8 while Canada with 618.9 and 499.9 . france produces 561.2 and consume 462.9 . Brazil come at 8th spot in list with 530.7 and 455.8 . 9th is Germany with 526.6 and 582.5 , german consume more electricity than it produce. on the last spot korea,rep. produce 485.1 and consume 449.5 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report the main figures for all ten countries, and the comparisons for China and the United States are accurate. You also correctly identify Germany as the exception where consumption exceeds production. However, the response lacks a clear overview of the chart’s main pattern: China and the US are far ahead, while the remaining countries produce and consume much less. The opening focuses on continents and population or industry, which are not shown by the data, rather than summarising the key features. There is also a factual error: Japan’s production is 936.2 billion kWh, not 938.2. To strengthen the response, begin with a concise overview and prioritise the largest contrasts and the Germany exception.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The information is presented in a broadly understandable order, moving from the highest-ranked countries down to Korea, and the repeated production-and-consumption figures make the comparisons easy to follow. However, the response is essentially one long paragraph, with no clear separation between an overview and supporting details. Several transitions are abrupt, as in “Russia on third” followed immediately by Japan, India and Canada. The opening also includes general comments that interrupt the chart description. Organise the response into a short introduction and overview, followed by one or two detail paragraphs grouped by the largest producers and the lower-ranked countries. Use linking phrases such as “By contrast” to make the Germany exception stand out.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses relevant chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “top of the list” and “respectively,” so the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, the range is limited and some wording is imprecise or repetitive: “come at the top,” “come on second” and “on the last spot” are repeated informal formulations. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “arround,” “elecricity,” “conclued” and “repectively,” which reduce accuracy. Use standard collocations for describing data, such as “ranked first,” “recorded” and “stood at,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid unsupported phrases such as “considerablely a small country,” which do not help describe the figures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most of the response relies on short, simple statements, and there is little variety in sentence structure. Frequent errors in verb forms and agreement are visible in examples such as “China come,” “China produce,” and “United States come on second.” Some entries are sentence fragments, including “Russia on third with 1057and 1038 respectively,” while punctuation and spacing are inconsistent. These errors sometimes make the relationships between figures less clear, even though the overall meaning can usually be recovered. Practise complete comparative sentences, for example, “Russia ranked third, producing 1,057 billion kWh and consuming 1,038 billion.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries when editing.

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