Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar graph illustrates the top ten countries china,unitead states,russsia,japan,india,canada for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Overall, it can bee seen that the highest electricity cosume and produce by china. However, the lowest cosume and produce of electricity by korea,rep in 2014.

To begin with, information about the consumption and production electricity in ten countries. In2014, the highest electricity produce and consume by china with 5,398 billion kWh produce and consume 5,322 billion kWh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overall point: China has the highest production and consumption, while Korea is described as the lowest. You also report China’s two figures accurately. However, the response covers only a small part of the chart: it names just six countries in the introduction and gives no comparisons for the United States or the other countries. The claim that Korea is lowest in both measures is inaccurate, since Germany has the lowest production, while Korea has the lowest consumption. The response is also 69 words, below the required 150; the nine words copied from the prompt are excluded. Add a fuller overview and select key comparisons across the countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and a detail paragraph, and the sequence from general description to a specific figure is understandable. The paragraph beginning “Overall” signals an overview, while “To begin with” introduces detail. However, the final paragraph mostly repeats the overview and provides only China’s data, so the report has little progression or development. The phrase “information about the consumption and production…” is a fragment rather than a complete lead-in, and the response ends abruptly without covering the remaining countries. Build a clear progression by grouping the leading countries and the lower figures, and use linking phrases to show comparisons rather than simply introducing another section.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “bar graph,” “production,” “consumption,” and “billion kWh,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling and collocation errors make the writing less clear: “cosume,” “produce” used as a noun-like form, and “highest electricity produce and consume” are not natural expressions. Country names are also misspelled or inconsistently presented, including “unitead states,” “russsia,” and “china.” Use accurate forms such as “electricity production” and “electricity consumption,” and check proper nouns carefully. A wider set of comparison terms, such as “exceeded,” “followed by,” and “whereas,” would help you describe the chart more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few sentence forms, including an overview introduced by “Overall” and a sentence with “However,” but grammatical control is weak and the structures are mostly simple or incomplete. For example, “the highest electricity cosume and produce by china” lacks an appropriate verb form and auxiliary; “the lowest cosume and produce of electricity by korea” has the same problem. “In2014, the highest electricity produce and consume by china…” also has faulty sentence structure, and the opening list lacks spaces after commas. These errors make several statements difficult to interpret, even though the intended comparison is sometimes recoverable. Practise complete clauses such as “China produced and consumed the most electricity,” then vary them with accurate comparative sentences.

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