Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line bar picture information about the reporting the main featuring and make compression relevant. The first rank country china is electricity is black producation line numbers is 53, 98 and two line is numbers of 53,22 consumption. The information of two step line rank country is united States is production line numbers in 40,099 and consumption line numbers of 38,66. The rank country is Russia production billion khw numbers of 10,57 and consumption billion khw numbers in 10,38. The four rank country is japan production billion khw numbers of 936.2 and consumption line billion khw nunbers in 856.7. These many country india canada and France and Brazil and germany But the highest rank country and consumption nubers and production numbers of country china and the lowest rank and consumption billion khw and production is low of country is korea.rep. The table line information provides numbers and rank country electric bill consumption and production.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart as comparing electricity production and consumption and report several figures for China, the United States, Russia and Japan. You also recognise that China is highest in both measures and Korea is among the lowest. However, the response gives no clear overview of the main pattern across the countries, and several figures are incorrectly written: for example, China’s production is 5,398, not “53, 98,” and the US figures are 4,099 and 3,866, not “40,099” and “38,66.” The remaining countries are mostly named without meaningful comparisons, and the claim that Korea is the lowest in both measures overlooks Germany’s lower production? (Korea is indeed lowest in production and consumption.) To improve, select accurate key figures and compare the notable exception that Germany consumes more than it produces.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic sequence through the ranked countries: China, the United States, Russia and Japan are discussed before the remaining countries are grouped together. This gives the reader some sense of the chart’s order. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, with no distinct overview or clear grouping of the information. Repeated constructions such as “the rank country is” and “numbers of” make the progression mechanical, while the sentence beginning “These many country…” does not clearly connect the countries named to a comparison. Use an overview first, then organise the largest producers and consumers together, followed by the lower-ranked countries and Germany’s exception. Clear sentence boundaries and linking phrases would make the relationships easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “rank,” and “billion kWh,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or forms strain understanding. “Line bar picture information” is not a natural description of a bar chart, “make compression relevant” appears to mean making comparisons, and “electric bill” is not an appropriate term for electricity output or use. There are also misspellings such as “producation” and “nunbers.” Use standard chart language consistently—for example, “bar chart,” “figure,” “amount,” “higher than,” and “whereas”—and check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts to report figures in simple sentence patterns, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make the relationships between words unclear. For example, “The first rank country china is electricity is…” contains several competing sentence structures, while “The rank country is Russia production… numbers of…” lacks a clear grammatical link between the country and its figures. Articles, word order, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistently controlled. Most statements follow the same fragment-like pattern, so there is little evidence of a wider range of structures. Practise a reliable model such as “China produced 5,398 billion kWh and consumed 5,322 billion kWh,” then vary it with comparisons using “while” or “whereas.”

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