Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates that the countries who produced huge amount electricity in addition the given chart shows the consumption.

From the given bar chart countries in 2014 China on top ranked who produced electricty 5398 billion kWh while the people used energy 5322 billion kWh. United States gained energy from resources and produced electricty 4099 billion kWh and the 3866 billion kWh consumed by the people of States. The production of electricity in Russia was 1057 BkWh while the consumpted amount of electricty was 1038. Japan produced electricity in 20214 was 936.2 billion kWh however people used 856.7 billion kWh. India used their sources to get electricty was 871 billion kWh while the consumpted amount was 688.8 billion kilo watt per hour.

Canada produced electricity 618.9 billion kwh however people used 499.9 billion kilo watt per hour. The annual production of France was 561.2 billion kWh while its consumption was 462.9 billion kWh only. Brazil produced electricity 530.7 billion kilo and their nation used 455.8 billion kilo of energy. The usage of Germany of energy was 582.5 billion kilo but they only produced 526.6 billion kilo watt its cleared that the production of enegery was down while Republic of Korea produced eneger 485.1 billion kilo wawtt their people cunsumes 449.5.

From all the countries China produced largest amount of energy while Germany produced less amount of engery.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You report figures for most countries and correctly identify China as the largest producer, while noting Germany’s production is below its consumption. However, the overview is incomplete: saying Germany “produced less” is misleading because it had the lowest production, but not the lowest consumption, and the chart’s main contrast is the very large lead of China and the United States over the other countries. Several details are inaccurate, including India’s consumption (given as 688.8 rather than 698.8) and the year for Japan (“20214”). The response mainly lists figures rather than selecting and comparing the most important features. A clearer overview and accurate, selective comparisons would make the report address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence, moving from China and the United States through the remaining countries, and a final sentence attempts to summarise the data. Paragraphing separates some of the information, and “while” and “however” are used to contrast production with consumption. However, the report reads largely as a country-by-country list, with little grouping or progression between the major and minor figures. Some links are awkward or repetitive, and the final overview does not clearly connect to the comparisons in the body. Organise the report into an overview followed by grouped comparisons—for example, the two leading countries, then the much lower figures—and use linking expressions only where they clarify a relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “produced,” “consumption,” “annual production,” and “ranked,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “electricity,” “energy,” and “produced” repeated frequently. Several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear, including “countries who produced huge amount electricity,” “consumpted amount,” and “people used energy.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “electricty,” “enegery,” and “cunsumes” also reduce precision. Use standard terms consistently, such as “electricity generation” and “electricity consumption,” and describe the figures directly rather than referring vaguely to what “people” used. This would make the report more precise and easier to read.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine information using clauses with “while” and “however,” and some basic sentence patterns communicate the production and consumption figures. Nevertheless, sentence structures are often incomplete or incorrectly formed. For example, “The bar chart illustrates that the countries who produced huge amount electricity” lacks a clear, complete construction, while “India used their sources to get electricity was 871 billion kWh” combines clauses without a grammatical link. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and verb forms, as in “China on top ranked” and “their people consumes.” Use straightforward, complete sentences with a consistent past-tense reporting pattern, and check that each clause has a subject and a correctly formed verb.

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