Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the bar chart compares the production and consumption of electricity in 2024 in the top 10 coutries.

Overall, China dominates the production and consumption of electricity in 2024 surpassing a littel the USA, however all of Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea arranged from the higher to lowest had a tiny percentages comparing to the tow other countries, and we can see that all of the nine countries procduce more than they consume except Germany.

China dominates the production and consumption of electricity in 2024 where it generated around 5400 billion KWh and dropped in the consumption to 5322 billion KWh, the USA accurated a notabel percentage in both production and consumption by producing 4099 and 3866 billion KWh, all of Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea arranged from the highest to lowest has the same pattern where thier production of electrity were higher than thier consumption except Germany , however all of them recorded approximatly from 1057 to around 450 billion KWh.

Meanwhile, Germany had an oppisite pattern where the percentage of consumption surpassed the percentage of production by around 55 billion KWh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: China and the United States lead by a wide margin, and Germany is the only country where consumption exceeds production. The figures for China and the United States are broadly correct, and the German difference of about 55 billion kWh matches the chart. However, the overview says the other countries have “tiny percentages,” which is vague, and the claim that all nine countries produce more than they consume is inaccurate because Germany is one of the ten. The grouped range “from 1057 to around 450” also obscures meaningful differences among the remaining countries. To strengthen the report, compare a few middle-ranking countries directly and describe the overall scale more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on the leading countries and the other producers, and a final sentence about Germany. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the second paragraph is overloaded with a long list of countries and repeats the overview’s point that Germany is the exception. Linking phrases such as “however” and “Meanwhile” are used, but the relationships between ideas are not always clear; for example, “all of Russia, Japan…” makes the comparison difficult to follow. Separate the leading countries from the remaining group, and use shorter sentences with clear references to improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “generated,” “surpassed,” and “billion kWh,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “dominates” for a chart describing one year, “accurated a notable percentage,” and “tiny percentages” when referring to electricity output. Spelling errors—including “coutries,” “littel,” “thier,” and “electrity”—are noticeable and reduce precision. Aim for standard reporting language such as “recorded,” “was considerably higher than,” and “accounted for,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would also help distinguish large gaps from small differences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a contrast clause in “Germany had an opposite pattern where…” and a comparison using “except Germany.” The main message is usually understandable, but some sentences are difficult to process because of faulty structure and agreement. For example, “all of Russia, Japan… arranged from the higher to lowest had” lacks a clear grammatical construction, while “all of them… has the same pattern” has a subject–verb agreement error. Tense is also inconsistent: the chart concerns 2014, but the response repeatedly says “in 2024.” Use the past tense consistently and divide long sentences into shorter, controlled clauses. Check articles, agreement, and punctuation when revising.

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