Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This bar chat give as an information about production and information about various countries.

In China the production of electricity is 5398 (billion kWh) and consumption is 5322 (billion kWh).United States has production rate 4099 (billion kWh)and consumption is 3866 (billion kWh).Russia has 1057 (billion kWh) production rate and 1038 (billion kWh) consumption.Japan has 936.2 (billion kWh) prodution and 856.7 (billion kWh) consumption of electricity.In India 871 (billion kWh) production and 698.8 (billion kWh) consumption rate of electricity. Canada has production of electricity at 618.9 (billion kWh) and consumption at 499.9 (billion kWh).in France the production of electricity is 561.2 (billion kWh)and consumption at 462.9 (billion kWh).Branzil has production rate 530 (billion kWh) and consumption at 455.8 (billion kWh).Germany a rank country their production rate of electricity is 526.6 (billion kWh) and consumption is placed at the rate of 582.5 (billion kWh).in Countries like Korea,Rep production rate for electricity is at 485.1 (billion kWh) and consumption rate is at 499.5 (billion kWh)

This is my observation about bar chat.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You report figures for all ten countries, and most are close to the chart, including China, the United States and Russia. However, the response mainly lists individual production and consumption values rather than summarising the main features. It needs a clear overview, such as noting that China and the United States lead by a large margin and that production exceeds consumption in nearly every country. There are also factual inaccuracies: Germany’s production is lower than its consumption, while Korea’s consumption is 449.5, not 499.5; Brazil’s production is 530.7. These omissions and errors leave the task only minimally addressed. Group the data and highlight the key comparisons instead of reporting every figure in sequence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows the chart’s country order, so readers can generally identify which figures belong together. However, it is presented as one long paragraph, with no clear separation between an introduction, an overview and supporting details. The repeated pattern of “production … and consumption …” makes the report feel like a list, and there is little progression from the most important comparisons to less significant details. The opening and closing sentences do not help organise the information. Use distinct paragraphs and linking phrases to group the two leading countries, the middle-ranking countries and any notable exception, such as Germany. This would make the relationships between the figures easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant basic terms such as “production,” “consumption,” “rate” and “billion kWh,” and the reader can usually understand the intended comparisons. However, vocabulary is repetitive and sometimes imprecise: “production rate” is repeated, while “This is my observation about bar chat” does not function as an appropriate report conclusion. There are also spelling errors in “bar chat,” “prodution” and “Branzil,” and the phrase “Germany a rank country” is unclear. Use a wider set of accurate reporting expressions, such as “generated,” “consumed,” “stood at” and “ranked,” while keeping the wording formal. Check country names and chart-related terms carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most information is expressed through simple sentence patterns, often repeating “X has production … and consumption …”. This limited range, together with frequent errors in sentence boundaries and punctuation, makes the report difficult to read smoothly. For example, “China … (billion kWh).United States” lacks a space and a clear sentence boundary, while “in France the production …” begins without appropriate capitalisation. Some constructions are incomplete or awkward, as in “Germany a rank country their production rate …”. Try combining related figures in controlled comparative sentences, and check articles, sentence boundaries, capital letters and punctuation. The basic meaning is often recoverable, but errors recur and occasionally obscure the relationships between the figures.

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