Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the electrictity production and consumption in billion kWh unit in the top ten countries in the year 2014.

Overall, the production was higher than consumption in all countries, except Germany, where electricity was consumed more than it is produced.

In terms of production, China and the US was at the top, generating 5,398 and 4,099 billion kWh power, respectively. Then comes, Russia and Japan, both of them produced energy between 930 to 1100 tons. India was at the fifth position in terms of power generation, producing 871 billion kWh amount of electricity. The power produced by the countries, including Canada, France, Brazil, and Germany did not exceed by 630 billion kWh. Korean Republic was the lowest country, producing only 485 tons of electricity.

In terms of consumption, China and the US remained the top two high consumers. In contrast, Russia was the only country whose consumption was relatively similar to its production. While people of Germany consumed more energy of around 580, than they produced. The consumption was lower than production by the rest of the countries (Japan, India, Canada, France, and Brazil). Electricity usage in Korea was the lowest of about 450.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: production exceeds consumption in every listed country except Germany, and China and the United States lead both measures. The overview is clear, and you support it with useful figures for the two leaders and several other countries. This covers the task well, while showing some of the detail and comparison expected in a stronger response. However, the production figures for Russia and Japan are described in “tons,” which is the wrong unit, and the consumption section gives few exact comparisons beyond the leaders and Germany. The statement that Russia’s figures are “relatively similar” is relevant but could be supported with values. Include more precise data for the middle-ranking countries and keep units consistent.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised into a clear introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for production and consumption. This gives the reader a logical route through the chart, and signposts such as “Overall,” “In terms of production,” and “In terms of consumption” make the comparisons easy to follow. The sequence from the leading countries to lower-ranked ones is also sensible. To make the progression more polished, avoid abrupt or incomplete transitions: “Then comes, Russia and Japan” is awkwardly punctuated, while “While people of Germany…” is a fragment rather than a complete contrast. You could also connect the consumption comparisons more explicitly to the production figures, rather than listing countries in parentheses.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of chart-related vocabulary, including “generating,” “power generation,” “consumption,” and “remained the top two.” These choices help communicate the main comparisons, and the meaning is generally clear. However, some word choices and collocations are imprecise: “tons” is not an appropriate unit for electricity, “high consumers” is less natural than “largest consumers,” and “amount of electricity” is awkward in this context. There is also a spelling error in “electrictity.” Aim for precise, consistent terms such as “electricity output,” “consumption,” and “billion kWh,” and use natural comparison phrases. This would improve accuracy and flexibility without requiring more elaborate vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including the overview contrast “except Germany, where…” and the sentence beginning “In contrast.” Most of the message remains understandable, but some errors in agreement, sentence construction, and verb forms limit accuracy. For example, “China and the US was” should use a plural verb, and “Then comes, Russia and Japan” has an awkward verb form and comma placement. “While people of Germany consumed…” is a dependent clause left without a main clause, and “than they produced” does not fit smoothly with “more energy of around 580.” Practise complete contrast sentences and check subject–verb agreement, tense consistency, and punctuation when joining clauses.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.