Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compare top ten countries regarding to electricity production and consumption in 2014.

Overall the China was on the top of list for electricity production and as well as consumption.

Following this USA was the second country for both, production and consumption of electricity.

The smallest numbers for electricity production and consumption was for the Korea,Rep.

The China produce 5,398 billion kWh of electricity which was highest number among all countries. The USA produce 4,099 billion kWh which was second highest number. The consumption rate for China was 5,322 billion kWh, while for the USA it was 3866 billion kWh.

The Russia produce and consume about similar amount of electricity. Like they produce 1,057 billion kWh and consume 1,038 billion kWh of electricity.

Only the Germany consume high amount of electricity from the production of their total electricity. They produce 523.6 billion kWh electricity and consume 582.5 billion kWh of electricity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main ranking accurately: China leads both production and consumption, the United States is second, and South Korea has the lowest figures. You also select useful comparisons, including the close production and consumption totals for Russia and Germany’s higher consumption than production. However, coverage is uneven: most countries between Russia and Germany are not discussed, and the overview could better summarise the broad pattern that production exceeds consumption in nearly all listed countries. There is also a factual error in Germany’s production figure: the chart gives 526.6 billion kWh, not 523.6. The response addresses the task with relevant information, but some features are underdeveloped and the data selection could be more representative.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs giving figures and comparisons. This makes the main points easy to locate, and the progression from the leading countries to Russia and Germany is generally logical. Some linking is mechanical, however, particularly the repeated use of “The” at the start of sentences and “while” to contrast the two leading countries. The overview also repeats the ranking information rather than grouping the data into broader patterns, and the final paragraph feels isolated because it focuses on Germany alone. To improve progression, organise the details into clearer groups, such as the two leading countries, the middle-ranking countries, and the exception of Germany.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “highest,” and “similar amount,” so the chart’s subject is communicated clearly. However, the range is somewhat repetitive, with “electricity” and “produce/consume” appearing frequently, and several expressions are not natural or precise. For example, “regarding to electricity production” and “smallest numbers” are awkward, while “consumption rate” is less suitable than “consumption figure” for these totals. Country names and labels should also be presented consistently, such as “South Korea” rather than “Korea,Rep.” A wider set of accurate comparison phrases would make the report more fluent and precise without requiring overly complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple statements and more developed comparisons, and the meaning is generally clear. Some grammatical errors remain, especially with articles, agreement, and verb forms. For instance, “The bar chart compare” should be “The bar chart compares,” and “The China produce” should be “China produced” or “China generated.” In the overview, “The smallest numbers … was” has a plural subject and needs “were”; the country name also does not take “the” in these sentences. The sentence beginning “Only the Germany consume…” contains similar article and tense problems. Most errors do not prevent understanding, but more consistent control of subject–verb agreement, articles, and past-tense reporting would strengthen accuracy.

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