Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the prouction and consumption of electricity in top countries namely China, United States, Russia, Japan, India ,Canada in 2014

Overall, it is clear that the topest rank country is China and largely produces electricity in 2014.While, the smallest country of electricity is korea, Rep significantly

In 2014, the largest rank country is China produce electricity around 5,398 and consume 5,322 billion electricity.Moreover the Russia and Japan gradually drop out and produce 1,057 billion and 1,038 electricity. However, Japan and India slightly produce and consume electricity approximately 9,36 and 6,98.

On the paradoxical side, Canada, France and Brazil considerablly plummet into various ranks.In contrast, the Germany and Korea, Rep drop out and lied into 5,26 consumption and 449.5 billion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include some relevant figures, especially China’s production and consumption, and you attempt an overall statement. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: Korea is described as the “smallest country of electricity,” although it is the lowest producer, while Germany has the lowest consumption figure among the listed countries? In fact, Germany’s consumption is 582.5, above several others. Several comparisons are also misreported: Russia’s consumption is 1,038, not its production, and Japan and India’s figures are confused. The response covers only a limited selection of the data and does not clearly summarise the main pattern. It is also 28 words below the required minimum, leaving important comparisons undeveloped.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and two detail sections, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover” and “In contrast” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the details are not grouped or compared consistently. For example, “Moreover the Russia and Japan gradually drop out” does not make clear what is being compared, and “On the paradoxical side” introduces no clear contrast. Some sentences combine unrelated countries and figures, so the reader must work to infer the intended meaning. Use one paragraph for the overview and organise the details into clear groups, comparing production and consumption for each group.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “rank” and “approximately,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “topest rank country,” “smallest country of electricity,” “gradually drop out” and “plummet into various ranks” do not describe the chart data naturally. There are also spelling errors, including “prouction” and “considerablly.” Aim for precise chart language such as “highest producer,” “lowest figure,” “rose/fell” only when a trend is shown, and “recorded” or “generated” for values. Avoid using dramatic verbs when the chart presents a single year.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including an overview beginning “Overall, it is clear that…” and a contrast introduced by “While.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure and verb forms often make the comparisons hard to interpret. For example, “China produce electricity” needs a past-tense verb, while “the largest rank country is China produce” combines incompatible structures. The sentence beginning “While” is incomplete, and punctuation is often missing after introductory phrases, as in “In 2014, the largest rank country…” followed by a run-on comparison. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense, articles and punctuation when joining comparisons.

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