Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Bar chart compares the genration and usage of the electricity of ten countries in year of 2014. Leading by China with maximum production of approximately 5400 kWh and has maximum consumption as well around 5322kWh having surplus of 78 kWh. Followed by US with output of 4100kWh approximately and utilization of 3866kWh results in glut of 233kWh of energy. While Russia is on third having almost equal figures of approximately 1060kWh production and consumption. Japan is also not for behind from Russia having excess of 80kWh energy. India is showing the surprising figure of 173kWh of overproduction of electricity in 2014. Canada, Brazil and Japan is also demonstrating the same figures. Germany is opposing the trend of over production and has a shortage of 56kWh in the year of 2014 in which production is 526kWh and usage of 582kWh.The country which is leading from the buttom is korea. Rep which produces teh 485 kWh in 2014 and consume 449 kWh in same year having surplus of 26kWh in the year of 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report several relevant comparisons, including China and the United States as the leading producers and Germany as the exception where consumption exceeds production. However, the response only partially selects and summarises the main features: it has no clear overview of the large gap between the top two countries and the much lower figures for the rest. Some details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, Japan’s production-consumption difference is about 80 billion kWh, but the statement that Canada, Brazil and Japan show “the same figures” is not supported; Canada and Brazil each have much larger surpluses. Korea’s surplus is about 36 billion kWh, not 26. A clearer overview and more accurate, selective comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly understandable sequence, moving from China and the United States through several other countries and ending with Korea. Linking expressions such as “Followed by,” “While,” and “Germany is opposing the trend” show an attempt to connect comparisons. However, the information is presented as one long paragraph, with no distinct overview or clear grouping of the countries. Some transitions are awkward or leave relationships unclear, particularly “Canada, Brazil and Japan is also demonstrating the same figures,” which does not explain what figures are being compared. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview, and grouped detail paragraphs, and use linking phrases to show precise comparisons rather than simply listing countries.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of topic vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “surplus,” “overproduction,” and “shortage,” and these terms help communicate the chart’s subject. There are also attempts at less common wording, such as “glut,” but this is not a natural choice for a formal data report; “surplus” is more appropriate. Several word-choice and spelling problems reduce precision, including “genration,” “utilization” where “consumption” would be clearer, “not for behind,” and “leading from the buttom.” Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “showing the same figures.” Aim for accurate collocations and consistent terminology, and check spelling carefully so the reader can focus on the comparisons.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentence patterns, for example, “Germany is opposing the trend of over production and has a shortage…,” but control is uneven and many sentences contain errors. The opening lacks an article and has an awkward structure (“Bar chart compares…”), while “Leading by China” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. There are also agreement and verb-form problems, as in “Canada, Brazil and Japan is” and “produces… and consume.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries are inconsistent, with several ideas joined into long strings. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, check singular and plural agreement, and separate each comparison with appropriate punctuation.

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