Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the electricity distribution and consumption of top ten different countries in 2014

Overall,chaina recorded the heights proportion of consumption and production ,whereas korea had the lowest number of electricity consumed and supply

as it can be see that chaina increased significantly production electricity 4,099 billion kilowatt-hour and counsumption 3,866 billion kilowatt-hour ,then the period between first and second time experienced a gradual rise in russia,which went up production electric 1,057 billion kilowatt-hour and consumed 1,038 kilowatt-hour, next japan witnessed a drastic fall consumed 856.7 billion kilowatt-hour electric, after that india supply electricity around 871 kilowatt electric and conumed 698.8 kilowatt electric,subsquentely canada is supported

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the chart’s subject and attempts an overview, noting that China is highest and Korea lowest. However, the overview is inaccurate: China leads both production and consumption, but Korea is not the lowest in consumption; Germany’s consumption is higher than its production, and Korea is the lowest producer. Several figures are also assigned to the wrong country: 4,099 and 3,866 belong to the United States, not China. The report covers only part of the data and ends abruptly at “Canada is supported,” leaving most countries and comparisons unreported. The response is 108 words, below the required 150. To improve, give an accurate overview and select key comparisons across the full chart, checking each figure against its country.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and an overview before moving into country details. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “then,” “next,” and “after that” show an effort to connect information. However, the progression is difficult to follow: the account moves from China to Russia, Japan, India, and Canada without a clear grouping or consistent comparison of production and consumption. The long final sentence contains several ideas joined together, and the response stops mid-thought. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and details, group countries by scale or notable differences, and make each sentence compare the two measures clearly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “gradual rise,” and “drastic fall,” so the reader can recognise the general topic. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate or repetitive: “electricity distribution” is not a precise description of the chart, “heights proportion” is unclear, and “chaina,” “counsumption,” and “conumed” are misspelled. Phrases such as “supply electricity” and “consumed … electric” are awkward, while “is supported” does not convey a clear comparison. Build a more reliable set of chart-reporting expressions, such as “generated,” “used,” “stood at,” and “was slightly higher than,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and uses some sequencing clauses, but control is inconsistent. The opening lacks a full stop, and the overview has problems with articles and sentence structure: “Overall,chaina recorded…” needs clearer punctuation and a complete, correctly formed clause. In “as it can be see,” the verb form is incorrect; “Japan witnessed a drastic fall consumed…” also lacks a grammatical connection between the ideas. Commas are frequently used where full stops would make the meaning easier to follow, and the final clause is incomplete. Practise writing short, accurate comparison sentences first, then combine them with clauses such as “while” or “whereas.” Check verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries carefully.

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