Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The aligned bar chart depicts information about the production and consumption of electricity in 2014 by top ten counties ranking from highest to lowest

The China is the higest among all the counties in production as well as consumption whereas korea has the lowest number for both.furthermore United states is the only country after china with maximum number.

On the one hand we have so many other counturies including India,Japan with minimum values or around 1057 to 871 for production and 1038 to 696.8 for usage.Russia is the only county with the constant proportion for both.

Moreover on the another hand counties like Canada, France,Brazil,Germany are on minimum value ranging from 618 to 485 for production and 499 to 449 for consumption ranking them as lower then others.

Overall by comparing among all the ten countries it is clear that China remains the highest among all ranking as the top with maximum number which no other country can ever compete with.Other countries remains in minimum number expect United states which has maximum number after China whereas Russia was the only single counrty with the equal value of consumption and production with just slightly difference between both.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s main leaders correctly: China ranks first in both production and consumption, the United States is second, and Korea has the lowest figures. You also attempt an overview and include several relevant comparisons. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear. Russia did not have equal production and consumption: the figures are 1,057 and 1,038 billion kWh. The claim that India and Japan have “minimum values” is misleading, as they are mid-ranking countries, and Germany’s consumption (582.5) exceeds its production (526.6), unlike the general pattern you describe. Select the key contrasts more precisely and support them with accurate figures; the overview should summarise the overall pattern rather than repeat broad claims.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an opening, several body paragraphs and a concluding overview, so there is some organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because comparisons are grouped inconsistently: India and Japan are described as having “minimum values,” while Canada, France, Brazil and Germany are also grouped as low, despite Germany’s consumption being higher than its production. Linking phrases such as “On the one hand” and “Moreover on the another hand” do not establish clear relationships between the points and feel mechanical. The conclusion repeats the opening claim about China rather than bringing together the main comparisons. Organise the report by clear patterns—for example, the two leading countries, the middle group and the notable German exception—and use simpler, more precise transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “ranking” and “proportion,” and the reader can generally identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. For example, “constant proportion” does not describe Russia’s figures, which are close but not equal, and “minimum values” is not suitable for countries in the middle of the ranking. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “higest,” “counturies” and “counrty,” alongside repeated use of “maximum number.” Use precise terms such as “highest output,” “lowest consumption” and “a small difference,” and check spelling and collocation carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a comparison introduced by “whereas” and a concluding sentence beginning “Overall.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, articles, agreement and punctuation sometimes make the report hard to read. Examples include “The China is the higest,” “Russia is the only county with the constant proportion for both,” and “Other countries remains in minimum number.” Several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation, such as “both.furthermore United states.” Practise accurate article use, subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries, then build longer comparisons from correctly formed clauses. These improvements would make your ideas clearer without requiring more complicated structures.

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