Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

some of the most developed countries' production and consumption of electricity bar chart is given. here, we can see China is on the top of the list with highest production of electricity about 5398 kWh. But the consumption rate is also comparatively near to the rate of production. The second copuntry is USA. Production rate of electricity is more than consumption rate. there should be a comparative difference between prodcution and consumption ratse, as to avoid power shortfalls. Germany on the pther hand, has more consumption rate that its production of electricity. So, this country has to borrow electricity from its neighbouring countries. It fulfills its needs oof electricity by paying and buying electricity from other countries in order to avoid power shortfalls. The other countries on the bar chart have more production rate than the consumption rate. overall, for the smooth working of a country is dependent upon the more production of electricity than the consumption rate.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several relevant features: China leads production, the US is second, and Germany is the exception where consumption exceeds production. These observations are broadly supported by the chart. However, the response only partially summarises the data: it gives almost no comparisons across the remaining countries and omits the substantial gap between the two leading countries and all others. The claim that Germany must “borrow electricity” and that production should exceed consumption to prevent shortfalls is not shown by the chart; these are assumptions rather than reported information. Include a concise overview of the main pattern, then support it with accurate comparisons and selected figures, without explaining causes or consequences that the visual does not provide.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable sequence, moving from China and the US to Germany and then the other countries, and “overall” signals an attempt to conclude. However, it is presented as one continuous paragraph, so the overview and supporting details are not clearly separated. Progression is also limited: the discussion shifts from chart data to speculation about borrowing electricity and power shortfalls, which interrupts the summary. Some linking is repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “rate” and “production and consumption.” Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs. Use comparisons to connect related figures, rather than adding unsupported explanations.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “comparative difference,” and “power shortfalls,” so the subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are awkward, such as “consumption rate,” “more production rate,” and “borrow electricity.” Repetition of “rate” also makes the description less precise. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “copuntry,” “prodcution,” “pther,” and “oof,” which reduce the accuracy of the writing. Use the chart’s units and terms consistently, and choose neutral reporting language rather than speculative wording. For example, describe Germany’s consumption as exceeding its production instead of inferring that it imports electricity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including “Germany, on the other hand, has more consumption rate that its production,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and grammatical forms occur frequently enough to make parts awkward or difficult to follow. For example, “for the smooth working of a country is dependent upon” has an unclear construction, while “more consumption rate that its production” lacks a correct comparison structure. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as seen in the lowercase sentence openings and the run-on flow of ideas. Practise clear comparative patterns such as “consumption was higher than production,” and check each sentence for a complete subject and verb. More accurate simple sentences would improve clarity before adding complexity.

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