Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart gives information about top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Overall, it can be seen that china, consumption of showed a significant during the period, while the proportion of production in china experience a electicity trend.

In detail, the consumption rates of China is 5322 and production rate is 5398. Respectively in United States is consumption is 3866 and production is 4099went up sharply through the period, exceeding Russia consumption is 1038 and the production is 1057 by the end of period. In the Japan and india the prodution rate936.2 and in india the rate is 871 and the consumption is decreades 856.7 and 698.8. Form Canada and France it experienced a rapid surge to more than consumption and continued with a gradual rise to production to 618 and 561.2.

Moving on Brazil in early the production is 530.7 the rate of consumption 455.8 was the highest among in german the german consumption is 582.5. However, it sharply decline to korea reo by recording the loest as compared, to the other countries the production is 485.1 and the consumption is 449.5 and the electricity was still the lowest by the end of the period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant figures, including China’s production and consumption and the United States’ totals. You also notice that Germany is unusual because its consumption figure exceeds production. However, the overview is not a clear, accurate summary: “china, consumption of showed a significant during the period” does not communicate a meaningful main feature, and the chart compares countries in one year rather than showing change “through the period.” Several comparisons are incomplete or difficult to interpret, particularly the statements about Canada and France. To strengthen the response, give a clear overview that China and the United States lead both measures by a wide margin, while Germany is the only listed country where consumption is higher than production, then report selected figures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an identifiable structure: an introduction, an attempted overview, and two detail paragraphs. Phrases such as “In detail” and “Moving on” show an effort to guide the reader. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because countries and figures are joined in unclear sequences. For example, the sentence beginning “Respectively in United States” runs into the Russia comparison, while the Canada and France sentence does not clearly distinguish the two countries’ data. Some linking expressions, including “However,” do not establish a clear contrast. Organise the details into logical groups, such as the two leading countries and the remaining countries, and use one clear comparison per sentence with explicit country references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “significant,” and “gradual rise,” and attempt to describe comparisons rather than simply list every figure. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, and several phrases obscure the intended meaning: “a electicity trend,” “experienced a rapid surge to more than consumption,” and “the loest” are examples. Spelling errors such as “prodution,” “decreades,” and “german” also reduce precision. Since the chart presents figures for a single year, avoid trend language such as “surge” or “decline.” Use precise comparison terms, for example, “was higher than,” “ranked second,” and “the largest producer and consumer.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to use both simple and more extended sentences, and the opening sentence communicates the chart’s topic. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between figures unclear. Examples include “the consumption rates of China is,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “United States is consumption is 3866,” which has a faulty sentence structure. The overview phrase “china, consumption of showed” is also not a complete, well-formed clause. Articles, verb forms, and punctuation are inconsistently controlled, and several sentences run together without clear boundaries. Build shorter, complete sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries, then add comparisons using accurate structures such as “China produced X, compared with consumption of Y.”

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