Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

SO WE HAVE VARIOUS COUNTRY TO MEASURE HOW MUCH THE PRODUCTION OF ELECTRICITY PRODUCED AND CONSUMPTION SO LET START BY CHINA. THE PRODUCTION OF CHINA ELECTRICITY IS 5398KWH AND CONSUMPTION IS 5322KWH THERE IS NOT MUCH DIFFRENCE NEXT IS UNITED STATES PRODUCTION IS 4099KWH AND CONSUMPTION IS 3866KWH WHICH IS BETTER THEN CHINA. FURTHERMORE RUSSIAN PRODUCTON OF ELECTRICITY IS 1057KWH AND CONSUMPTION IS1038KWH ON FOURTH POSITION JAPAN ELCTRICITY PRODUCTION IS 936.2KWH AND CONSUMPTION IS 856.7 MOVE FORWARD TO INDIA ELECTRICITY PRODUCTION IS 871KWH AND CONSUMPTION IS 698.8 .ON NO 6 WE HAVE CANADA ELECTRICITY PRODUCTION IS618.9 BILLION KWH AND CONSUMPTION IS 499.9 BILLION KWH ON 7 POSTION WE HAVE FRANCE WITH ELECTRICITY PRODUCTION OF 561.2 BILLION KWH AND CONSUMPTION IS 462.9 BILLION KWH ON NO 9 WE ARE GOING TO DISCUSS BRAZIL ELECTRICITY PRODUCTION IS 530.7 BILLION KWH AND CONSUMPTION OF 455.8 BILLION KWH MOVE FORWARD TO GERMANY ELECTRICITY PRODUCTION IS 526.6 BILLION KWH AND CONSUMPTION 582.5 BILLION KWH AT LAST KOREA REPUBLIC ELECTRICITY CONSUMPTION IS 449.5BILLION KWH AND PROSUCTION IS 449.5 BILLION KWH IF WE COMPARE ALL COUNTRIES BY PRODUCTION AND CONSUMPTION WISE ON TOP ELECTRICITY PRODUCTION AND CONSUMPTION COUNTRY IS CHINA AFTER THAT UNITED STATES AND THE WHERE LESS PRODUCTION AND CONSUMPTION IS KOREA, REP IT VARIOUS ON COUNTRY POPULATION

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You include figures for most countries and identify China and the United States as the leading producers and consumers, which gives the response relevant coverage. However, the overview is brief and does not clearly summarise the main pattern that production exceeds consumption in nearly every country, with Germany the exception. There are also factual inaccuracies: the United States is not “better then China” in the chart’s ranking, Brazil is listed as number eight rather than nine, and Korea’s production is 485.1, not 449.5 billion kWh. The final claim that the figures vary according to population is unsupported. A clearer overview and more accurate selection of key comparisons would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows the chart’s country sequence for much of its content, and transitions such as “Furthermore,” “Move forward” and “At last” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the writing is presented as one long block, with no clear introduction or separate overview, so the main message is difficult to distinguish from the list of figures. Linking phrases are repetitive and sometimes awkward, while the shift from country-by-country reporting to the final comparison is abrupt. Organise the response into paragraphs: introduce the chart, summarise the overall pattern, then group the leading countries and the lower figures. Use a smaller range of precise links to show comparisons rather than simply moving from one country to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “compare” and “billion kWh,” and the country names make the subject clear. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “how much the production of electricity produced,” “which is better then China,” and “on top electricity production and consumption country.” Spelling errors, including “diffrenace,” “producton” and “elctricity,” also reduce clarity. Some repeated sequencing expressions (“move forward,” “at last”) make the report sound like a spoken list rather than a formal summary. Practise accurate collocations for describing data, such as “generated,” “consumed,” “ranked first,” and “the figures were similar.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most of the response relies on simple present-tense statements, with limited control of sentence boundaries or more varied structures. Long strings of clauses run together without full stops, as in the opening sequence beginning “SO WE HAVE VARIOUS COUNTRY,” which makes relationships between ideas unclear. There are also recurring errors in sentence construction and agreement, for example “the production of China electricity is” and “the where less production and consumption is Korea.” Missing spaces and punctuation further affect readability. The repeated pattern “production is … and consumption is …” communicates basic comparisons, but a wider range of accurately formed sentences would improve the report. Use complete sentences, consistent punctuation, and structures such as “China produced…, while its consumption was…”.

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