Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar chart illustrates the ranking of the top 10 countries on their contribution for the generation and consumptions of electricity the generation and consumptions both are shown in kWh China produced total 5.398kWh while it's consumptions is around 5.322kwh which is the base of the chart After that it's U.S which production rate is 4.099kwh followed by the consumption rate by 3.866

Oh the top 3 Russia produced about 1.057khw electricity and it's energy demand is 1.038 kwh

Then japan and India which generates energy around 936.2 and 871 kwh while their electric useage is around 856.7and 698.8 Kwh

On the 6 and 7 around 618.9 and 561.2kwh energy are generated by Canada and France while it's consumptions are 499.9 and 462.9 respectively the last three countries are Brazil Germany and republic of south Korea the Brazil produce electricity total 530.7kwh while it's consumptions is around 455.8 followed by 526.6and 485.1 production by Germany and Korea and their consumption are around 582.5and 448.5 respectively

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You report many relevant figures and cover all ten countries, including the leading producers China and the United States and the lower-ranked countries. However, the response mainly lists data rather than selecting and summarising the chart’s main features. There is no clear overview identifying the large gap between the top two countries and the rest, or noting that production exceeds consumption in nearly every country, with Germany the exception. Some details are inaccurate: Korea’s consumption is 449.5, not 448.5, and the units are billion kWh rather than simply kWh. To improve, add a concise overview and make the most important comparisons explicit instead of relying on a country-by-country list.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The information follows a broadly understandable order, moving from China and the United States through the remaining countries, and words such as “followed by,” “while,” and “respectively” help connect comparisons. However, the response is presented as one long, loosely punctuated sequence, so the reader has to work to identify where one comparison ends and another begins. The opening also repeats “generation and consumptions,” and transitions such as “Oh the top 3” are unclear. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs. Use clear sentence boundaries and group countries by meaningful patterns, such as the two leading producers and the lower-output group.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “produced,” “production rate,” “energy demand,” and “consumption,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate or awkward, including “contribution for the generation,” “electric useage,” and “the Brazil produce.” Repetition of “produced” and “consumptions” also makes the account less precise. Use standard chart language and vary it carefully: for example, describe countries as “generating” or “consuming” electricity, and refer to “electricity output” and “consumption levels.” Check spelling and use the correct unit consistently, since the chart reports figures in billion kWh.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine comparisons in longer sentences, for example, “while their electric useage is around 856.7 and 698.8,” and the basic relationships between figures are often understandable. However, sentence structures are limited and frequently affected by errors in agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries. Examples include “the Brazil produce,” “their consumption are,” and the run-on opening, where several clauses are joined without full stops. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, making some passages difficult to follow. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then add controlled clauses with “while” or “whereas.” Check subject–verb agreement and ensure each sentence has a clear subject and finite verb.

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