Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrate the highest top ten nations for the production and using of electricity in 2014.

Overview, the bar graph show the different countries and how much they produce the electricity and also the consumption according to each country. The highest ranked country is China in both making and consumption, and the lowest is Korea,Rep, and in Russia the both making and usage are slightly equal in term of electricity.

The making of the power is rapid growth in China, and its ranked at the top all over the world due to its production over 5,398 billion kWh and usage over 5,322 billon kWh. However the second largest nation which is US it produce over a 4,099 billion kWh and consumption over 3,866 billion kWh of electricity.

On the other hand, the country which is ranked at the bottom of the graph is Korea, Rep has the lowest production over 485.1 kWh and the usage over 449.5 kWh of the electricity in the year 2014. but the only one nation with slightly similar in both the use and making of power is Russia over 1,057 kWh of production and 1,038 kWh of usage. Although in Germany the consumption is more rather than the production of electricity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main leaders and the broad pattern accurately: China ranks first in both measures, Korea is at the bottom, and Russia’s production and consumption are close. The figures given for China, the United States, Korea and Russia are also broadly consistent with the chart. This provides a relevant overview and supports the main comparisons. However, coverage of the other countries is limited, and the statement that China’s production shows “rapid growth” is not supported by a chart for a single year. Germany’s higher consumption is correctly noted but not quantified or compared with the other lower-ranked countries. To develop the response further, describe the general gap between production and consumption across most countries and include a few more meaningful comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about the leading and lower-ranked countries. Paragraphing helps separate these functions, and linking expressions such as “However” and “On the other hand” signal contrasts. The overall progression is understandable, though some connections are mechanical or unclear: “but the only one nation…” does not clearly link to the preceding point, and the final sentence about Germany feels added rather than integrated into a comparison. The overview also repeats the idea that the chart shows production and consumption without advancing the summary. Grouping countries by output level and using clearer references to the two measures would make the organisation more cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “ranked,” and “billion kWh,” so the main subject is generally clear. There are also attempts to vary wording with “making,” “usage,” and “using,” but these alternatives are often unnatural or imprecise in this context. Phrases such as “highest top ten nations,” “rapid growth,” and “the second largest nation” do not accurately express the chart’s ranking or data. Spelling and form errors, including “billon,” also reduce precision. Aim for a smaller set of accurate chart-reporting terms, such as “generated,” “consumed,” “ranked first,” and “recorded,” and use them consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including contrasts introduced by “However” and “Although,” and the reader can usually understand the comparisons. However, errors in sentence structure and verb forms recur. For example, “The bar graph illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, while “it produce” should be “it produces.” The opening “Overview, the bar graph show” is not a complete, well-formed introductory clause, and “the country which is ranked at the bottom … is Korea, Rep has” contains a faulty sentence structure. Articles and prepositions are also sometimes missing or awkward, as in “in term of electricity.” Practise accurate comparison sentences and check agreement, clause boundaries, and punctuation.

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