Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The chart below show the electricity in 2014 top ten countries production. summarize information by slectiong and reporting the main features, and make compariesons. The chart show the rank of top ten countries.

illustrate the graph show the china is the first position of the top ten countries china using the electricity 5,398 units but china used 5, 322 units and china is allover the world first in using electricity . The chart below show the united states is second in the rank of using the electricity .

Chart show the different rank countries . I mean russia is thirld number in used. And japen is using 936.2 units or india is five point , canada six number and france is seven number.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify China as the leading country and include its production and consumption figures accurately, and you mention several other countries in rank order. However, the response gives only a partial account of the chart: it does not provide a clear overview of the main pattern, omits most figures and comparisons, and stops at France. The statement that Japan is “using 936.2 units” misreports its production figure as consumption; the chart gives consumption as 856.7. The United States is described as second, but its values are not reported. The response is also 27 words below the required minimum. To develop the report, summarise the large gap between the top two countries and the rest, and compare production with consumption across more countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into short paragraphs, and the countries are introduced in roughly chart order. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the opening repeats the task wording rather than establishing a clear overview, and the later paragraphs do not develop a consistent comparison. Phrases such as “The chart below show” and “Chart show the different rank countries” recur without helping the reader understand how the information is connected. The phrase “I mean” also interrupts the report’s formal flow. Use a clear sequence: introduction, overview of the main pattern, then grouped comparisons. Linking expressions such as “By contrast” or “Similarly” can clarify relationships between production and consumption.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “rank,” “production,” “using electricity,” and “units,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise: “using” is repeated where “consumption” would be clearer, and “first position” and “thirld number” are awkward ways to describe rankings. There are also spelling errors, including “slectiong,” “compariesons,” and “japen,” which reduce accuracy. Aim to use a small range of precise terms consistently, such as “generated,” “consumed,” “ranked,” and “output.” Check spelling and choose natural collocations, for example, “ranked third in consumption” rather than “thirld number in used.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form connected sentences and use some simple clauses to report information, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Subject–verb agreement is incorrect in “The chart below show” and “The chart show,” while “china is the first position” lacks the grammatical structure needed to express a ranking. Several sentences run together or are joined unclearly, as in “China using the electricity 5,398 units but china used 5, 322 units.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, making sentence boundaries hard to identify. Practise accurate sentence patterns such as “China produced 5,398 billion kWh, while consumption was 5,322 billion kWh.” Use full stops to separate comparisons and check agreement, articles, and verb forms.

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