Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart compares the production and cosumption of electricity of the ten countries in 2014.

Overall, the China and the United states were the highest producer and consumer of electricity.

While, the Russia, Japan and India were average. Moreover, the Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea at the lowest.

Initially, the China produced 5,398 billion KWh and consumed 5,322 which is the largest proportion along with United States on 4,099 and 3,866 respectively. However, Russia 1,057 , 1,038. Japan 936.2 , 856.7. India 871 , 698.8,

Finally, the Canada which generated 618.9 and utilised 499.9. France 561.2, 462.9. Furthermore, Brazil 530.7,455.8. Germany 526.6,582.5 and the Korea Republic 485.1,449.5 which is the lowest ration as compare to other countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview by noting that China and the United States lead in both production and consumption. You also include figures for all ten countries, and most are accurately reported. However, the response is under the required 150 words, and several figures are listed without explaining the comparisons they show. The overview’s grouping of Russia, Japan and India as “average” is vague, while calling the remaining countries “the lowest” overlooks Germany’s consumption being higher than its production and higher than several other countries’ consumption. Develop the main patterns more clearly, including the large gap between the top two countries and the general production-consumption relationship.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs covering the countries. Sequencing from the largest producers to the smaller ones gives the reader some sense of order, and words such as “Overall,” “Initially” and “Finally” signal stages. However, the progression is weakened by the list-like presentation of figures, especially the sentence fragments “However, Russia 1,057, 1,038” and the subsequent entries. “While” also begins an incomplete sentence, and “Moreover” does not clearly connect the country grouping to the preceding point. Use complete sentences and organise comparisons into meaningful groups, with linking phrases that show how the figures relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumed,” “generated” and “utilised,” and the chart’s units are included. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing data. “Average” is imprecise for the middle-ranked countries, “lowest ration” appears to mean “lowest ratio” but does not describe the figures appropriately, and “as compare to” is an incorrect expression. There is also a spelling error in “cosumption.” Aim for precise terms such as “mid-ranking,” “output,” “consumption levels” and “compared with.” Varying language is useful, but prioritise accurate collocations over substituting synonyms mechanically.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex forms, and the opening sentence communicates the chart’s purpose clearly. However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction and agreement occur often enough to affect clarity. “While, the Russia, Japan and India were average” is not a complete, well-formed sentence, and “the China produced” uses an unnecessary article. The sequence “However, Russia 1,057, 1,038” is a fragment rather than a complete comparison. Punctuation around the figures is also inconsistent, making some data difficult to interpret. Practise writing complete sentences that state both production and consumption, and check articles, subject-verb agreement and punctuation.

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