Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrate that top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Overall,the bar chart shows the electricity production and the first feature is china .And china is the peak point of all chart .The china production is 5398billion kwh and the consumption is billion kwh while khw lowest feature is Korea.rep production is 485.1 and the consumption 449.5.

The other feature isUnited states and production show is chart is 4,099 and the consumption is 3,866 in contrast the Russia production 1,057 and the consumption is 1,038.The next country is japan and decreased fom russia and the production is 936.2 and also consumption is 856.7 while the india production 871 kwh and consumption is 698.8billion kwh.

The other feature is canadaand the consumtion is 499.9 and production is 618.9 whilw the france are decreased than the canada and the production is 461.2 and the consumtion is 499.9 .While the other country is france and the production is 561.2 and consumption is 462.9 in contrast the Brazil countries production is 530.7 and the consumtion is 455.8. The next country is Germany and the production or consumtion is 526.6 and 582.5.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant figures, such as China’s production (5,398) and Korea’s production and consumption (485.1 and 449.5). However, the overview is incomplete: China is correctly identified as the highest producer, but its consumption figure is left blank, and the response does not clearly summarise the broad pattern that production exceeds consumption in nearly all countries. Some details are inaccurate or confusing: France’s figures are initially mixed up with Canada’s, and Germany’s unusual pattern—consumption (582.5) exceeding production (526.6)—is listed without explanation. The report therefore selects some relevant information but only minimally fulfils the task. Check each figure against the chart and state the main comparisons clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has paragraph breaks and attempts to group countries, moving from China and Korea to other nations. This gives it some basic organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the comparisons are not consistently ordered, and several transitions are repetitive or unclear, such as “The other feature” and “The next country.” The Canada–France section is especially confusing: Canada’s figures are followed by a claim about France, then France is introduced again with different figures. Punctuation and spacing also make boundaries between ideas hard to see. Use a clear overview paragraph followed by two organised comparison paragraphs, and connect countries by meaningful similarities or contrasts rather than repeating the same transition.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “feature,” “other,” “country,” and “production” or “consumption.” Some chart language is relevant, including “peak point” and “in contrast,” but these expressions are either unnatural or not used precisely. Spelling errors such as “consumtion,” “fom,” and “whilw,” along with inconsistent forms such as “china” and “United states,” reduce clarity and control. The reader can generally identify the topic and many figures, but errors and awkward phrasing sometimes strain understanding. Build a small range of accurate comparison language—for example, “highest,” “lowest,” “exceeded,” and “whereas”—and check spelling and country names carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences using “while” and “in contrast,” but control is weak and the range of sentence structures remains limited. Errors occur frequently in basic sentence formation and agreement: “The bar chart illustrate” needs a plural verb, while “the France are decreased” is not a well-formed comparison. Several clauses lack necessary words or clear structure, as in “the consumption is billion kwh” and “the production or consumtion is 526.6 and 582.5.” Articles, capitalisation, punctuation, and spacing are also inconsistent. These problems sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to understand. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “while” or “whereas.”

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