Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrate the information the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014 .

In an overview in the bar graph the highest consumption and production of electricity country is china , and the lowest production and consumption of electricity country is korea in 2014 .

First and foremost in the korea,rep. the production of electricity is 485.1 billion kwh , and the consumption of electricity 449.5 billion kwh . As well as in the germany the production of electricity is 526.6 billion kwh , and the consumption of electricity 582.5 billion kwh . Furthermore in brazil the prodduction of electricity in 2014 is 530.7 billion kwh , and the consumption of electricity is 455.8 billion kwh . Additionally the production of electricity in france 2014 is 561.2 , and the consumption of electricity is 462.9. However the production of electricity in canada 618.9 , and the consumption of electricity is 499.9 . Moreover the production of electricity in india is 871 billion kwh , and the consumption of electricity is 698.8. Furthermore the consumption of electricity in japan 2014 is 936.2 billion kwh , and the consumption of electricity is 856.7 billion kwh .

Moreover the production of electricity in russia is 1057 billion kwh , and the consumption of electricity is 1038 billion kwh . At least but not last the production of electricity in united state is 4099 billion kwh , and the consumption of elctricity is 3866 billion kwh . At the end of in china the consumption of electricity in 2014 is 5322 billion kwh , and the production of electricity is 5398 billion kwh .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview: China has the highest production and consumption, while Korea has the lowest figures. Most reported values match the chart, including the figures for Brazil, Canada and the United States. However, the response mainly lists countries one by one rather than selecting and comparing the most important features. It also misdescribes Japan’s production as its consumption, and the overview misses the notable exception of Germany, where consumption exceeds production. To strengthen the response, group countries by meaningful patterns, compare the two leading countries with the rest, and report the Germany exception accurately. The response meets the task’s length requirement; 13 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, an overview and body paragraphs, and the country figures are generally presented in a recognisable sequence. However, there is no clear progression from the most significant comparisons to supporting details: the account moves through many countries in turn and gives nearly equal attention to each. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore,” “Additionally,” and “Moreover” are repeated mechanically, while “At least but not last” and “At the end of” do not create clear logical relationships. Organise the body around comparisons—for example, the two dominant producers, then the smaller countries—and use linking expressions only where they clarify how the information relates.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to identify the chart’s subject and repeatedly describe production and consumption, so the main topic remains understandable. However, the range is limited and repetitive: “the production of electricity” and “the consumption of electricity” recur throughout, with few alternatives for describing differences or ranking. Several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, including “At least but not last,” “the highest … country,” and “the consumption of electricity in Japan … is 936.2,” which also confuses the data category. There are spelling errors such as “prodduction” and “elctricity,” and country names are inconsistently capitalised. Use concise chart language such as “generated,” “used,” “output,” and “figure,” while checking spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can usually identify the country and figures being discussed. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence construction. The opening, “The bar graph illustrate the information the top ten countries,” lacks correct subject–verb agreement and a necessary grammatical link. Several clauses omit the verb or a preposition, as in “the production of electricity in france 2014 is 561.2” and “the production of electricity in canada 618.9.” Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, while the long list-like sentences make relationships harder to follow. Practise complete comparative sentences, accurate agreement, and consistent punctuation—for example, “Canada produced 618.9 billion kWh, compared with consumption of 499.9 billion kWh.”

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