Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart below shows the ten countries for the production and consumption of elictricity in 2014.

The ranking of electricity in top 10 countrys the production of this countries and counsumption of these countries the ranking of these countriesthe first one is chaina therefore the china is top 1 in the list in the production of electricity in the china production of elictricity is 5,398 (billion kwh) in the consumption of elictricity 5,322 (billion kwh). Howerver the second country is United states the prodouction of electricity is 4,099 (billion kwh) and the counsumtion of 3,866 (billon kwh). Moreover the theird country is russia the production is 1,057 billion kwh and the counsumtion is 1,038 billion kwh. the next is japan the production of this is 936.2 billion kwh and the counsumtion of this 856.7 kwh. the next is india the production is 871 kwh and the counsumption of this 698.8 kwh.

The sixth one is canada the production of this 561.2 and the counsumption is 499.9.moreover the next is france the production is 561.2 therfore the counsumtion is 462.9.the eigth one is brazil the production is 530.7 and the counsumtion is 455.5. however is the next is germany the production is 526.6 and the counsumtion is 582.5.and the last one is korea,rep the production is 485.1 and the counsumtion is 449.5.

this is a list of all our the country production and counsumption of elictricity top 10 countries the top 1 is china and the last one is korea rep.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report many country figures, including the leading positions of China and the United States and the lower output of Korea. However, the response mainly lists data rather than selecting and summarising the main features. It lacks a clear overview of the large gap between the top two countries and the rest, and does not highlight that production exceeds consumption in nearly every country, with Germany the exception. There are also factual inaccuracies: Canada’s production is given as 561.2 rather than 618.9, and Brazil’s consumption as 455.5 rather than 455.8. The final paragraph repeats the ranking instead of adding a meaningful comparison. Focus on accurate key patterns as well as selected figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence, moving from China through the ranked countries, and paragraph breaks provide some separation. However, there is little overall progression from an overview to grouped comparisons and supporting details. Most sentences repeat the same pattern, such as “the production is” followed by “the consumption is,” while connectors including “moreover,” “however” and “therefore” are sometimes used without a clear logical relationship. The opening is difficult to follow, and the final paragraph repeats information already given. Organise the report into an introduction, a concise overview, and body paragraphs that group the most important comparisons; use linking words only where they clarify the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Vocabulary is sufficient to name the countries and discuss the two measures, and terms such as “production,” “consumption” and “ranking” are relevant to the task. However, the range is basic and highly repetitive, with “the next,” “the production of this” and “the consumption of this” used repeatedly. Frequent spelling errors—such as “elictricity,” “counsumption” and “chiana”—make the writing less clear and reduce control of vocabulary. Some expressions are also unnatural, for example “the ranking of electricity in top 10 countries.” Build a more precise set of chart-reporting phrases, such as “generated,” “used,” “stood at” and “by comparison,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mostly on simple statements and shows limited control of sentence construction. Several clauses are joined or punctuated poorly, as in “the production of this 561.2 and the counsumption is 499.9.moreover,” and the opening sentence fragment does not form a clear complete statement. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, while repeated structures prevent the writing from demonstrating much grammatical range. Despite these problems, the reader can usually identify which figures refer to production and consumption. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use a small range of accurate comparison structures, such as “Production was higher than consumption in…”

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