Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates, how much electricity is produced and consumed by top ten countries in 2014.

Overall, the most noticeable feature is that, China and United states produce and consume the most energy.

Germany is the only country which, consume more eltricity than its production. While russia almost has equal figures in production and cosumption.

Furthermore, china is settled in the top postion for highest production of elerticity which is 5398 billion kwh and also in the consumption with the 5322 billion kwh. After that, United states holds the second position for the production and consumption of the energy.

Meanwhile, germany is the only country at rank 9, with dominant figures in cosumption rather than production.

Korea produced lowest eletricity and least consumption which placed them at 10th rank.

In adition, Russia maintain a balance in production and cosumption. Japan and India have minor diffrence in term of production and consumption. Therefore, Canada and France share almost same numbers in the field of electricity producution and consumption in 2014

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: China and the United States lead both production and consumption, and Germany is the exception where consumption exceeds production. You also note that Russia’s figures are close and correctly report China’s values. These are relevant features and give the response a clear overview. However, several comparisons are vague or incomplete: saying Japan and India have a “minor difference” does not clarify that India’s gap is notably larger, and the claim that Canada and France have “almost same numbers” is not well supported across both measures. The statement that Korea has the lowest production and consumption is accurate among the listed countries. More precise comparisons and a fuller selection of notable differences would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and further details about individual countries. This helps the reader follow the main points. However, progression is uneven because related comparisons are scattered across separate sentences, and some information is repeated, particularly Germany’s consumption exceeding production. Connect the figures into clearer groups—for example, compare the two leading countries first, then the middle-ranking countries, and finally the lowest figures. Linking words such as “Furthermore,” “Meanwhile,” and “In addition” are used, but they sometimes introduce points without showing a clear relationship to the previous sentence. More deliberate paragraphing and clearer links between comparisons would make the organisation more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “position,” and “figures,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more descriptive wording, such as “dominant figures” and “maintain a balance,” although these are not always natural in this context. Repeated use of “electricity,” “energy,” and “figures” limits the range, while several spelling errors—such as “eltricity,” “cosumption,” “postion,” and “producution”—are noticeable. Some collocations are also awkward: “settled in the top position” would be better expressed as “ranked first,” and “minor difference” is imprecise for comparing production and consumption. Aim for accurate spelling and concise, conventional chart language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrast in “Germany is the only country which, consume more electricity than its production” and the sentence beginning “While Russia…”. The main comparisons remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “which, consume” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, and “Russia maintain” should use a singular verb. The sentence beginning “While Russia…” is a fragment because it is not joined to a main clause. Commas are also misplaced after “illustrates” and “which,” and articles are missing in phrases such as “in the consumption.” Check agreement, sentence completeness, and punctuation, while continuing to vary sentence structures.

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