Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the making and using of electricity in 2014. Overall, China was in top position and Korea Repulic was lowest in both production and consumption.

In the beginning, China produced 5398 billion kWh and consumed 5322 billion kWh. But the United States at number 2 with 3866 billion kWh consumed energy. Furthermore, Russia and Japan manufacturing 1057 and 936.2 billion kWh alternatively. Additionally, India used only 698.8 billion kWh electricity in 2014. Canada made electricity 100 billion kWh more than consumption but France used only 462.9 billion kWh. In addition, Brazil was also in top ten positions with 530 billion kWh assembling electricity with only 455 billion kWh consumed. Moreover, Germany and Korea Republic were at nine and ten position in top ten. In 2014, Germany consumed 582.5 billion kWh energy as compared to Korea Republic which consumed least in the list which was 449.5 billion kWh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview that China ranks first while Korea is lowest, and several figures are reported accurately, including China’s production and consumption and Germany’s consumption. However, the response only partially summarises the data: it gives little comparison across the two series and omits important features such as the United States’ high figures and the general pattern that production exceeds consumption in most countries. Some details are incomplete or inaccurate: the US consumption figure is given, but its production is not; Canada’s difference is described only approximately; and Germany’s production is not reported, despite its consumption exceeding production. Select the main comparisons and explain them clearly rather than listing scattered details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall shape, beginning with an introduction and overview before moving through country details, so the reader can follow the general topic. However, the body does not develop a clear comparison-based progression. A sequence of connectors—“Furthermore,” “Additionally,” “In addition,” and “Moreover”—makes the information feel like a list, and some links do not show the relationship between the figures. For example, the US sentence mentions consumption without connecting it to production, while the Canada and France details shift abruptly between measures. Group countries by scale or by whether production exceeds consumption, and use fewer, more precise linking phrases. Clearer paragraphing would also help distinguish the overview from the supporting comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the chart’s topic, including “produced,” “consumed,” “top ten,” and “position,” and you attempt some variation rather than repeating one verb throughout. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing electricity data: “making,” “manufacturing,” and “assembling electricity” do not fit this context, while “used only” is vague when reporting a consumption figure. There are also spelling and form issues, such as “Korea Repulic,” and “alternatively” is not the right word for presenting two figures. Use standard chart language consistently—“generated” or “produced” for electricity, and “consumed” for use—and check country names and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer sentences, and most of the figures remain understandable. However, control is uneven, particularly in sentences that combine a country, rank, and data. For example, “But the United States at number 2 with 3866 billion kWh consumed energy” lacks a complete, well-formed clause, and “Russia and Japan manufacturing 1057 and 936.2” has no finite verb. The opening overview also needs an article in “was in top position.” Work on complete subject–verb structures and consistent past-tense reporting, such as “The United States ranked second, producing … and consuming …”. More accurate sentence boundaries and punctuation would make the comparisons easier to read.

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