Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar chart illustrates the production and consumption of the electricity in 2014 of the top ten countries. Overall, except Germany every country shows the higher electricity production compare to the consumption.

The top five countries on the list is Chaina, USA, Russia, Japan and India. Firstly, the bigest electricity produce country is Chaina, they produce 5,398 billion kWh electricity and use 5,322 almost the same amount what they prodice. Second largest prodecer is USA, they prodice 4,099 and consume 3,866. However, Russia, Japan and India's electricity production and deman are very little compared to them.

Additionally, the last five country such as, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea,Rep. share the 6 to 10 possition on ranking. The last possition is for Korea,Rep they prodece 485.1 and consume 449.5. Meanwhile, rest of others produce around the same between 618.9 to 526.6 which is enough for their consumption. However, the exception is only Germany their pordiction is not enough according to the consumption.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main pattern—that production exceeds consumption in every listed country except Germany—and correctly report several key figures, including China, the United States and Korea. The overview and grouping of the top and bottom five countries are relevant. However, some comparisons are too general or unclear: saying Russia, Japan and India are “very little compared to them” does not explain their relative figures, and “the rest … produce around the same” overlooks the substantial differences between Canada and the countries near 500 billion kWh. The statement that Germany’s production is insufficient is accurate, but its consumption figure is not given. To develop the report further, select a few more comparisons and support them with accurate data, especially for the middle-ranked countries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by paragraphs covering the higher- and lower-ranked countries. This makes the main direction of the report easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Additionally” and “Meanwhile” help signal relationships. Some connections are less precise, however. “However” introduces the Russia–Japan–India comparison without a clear contrast, and “the rest of others” makes the reference difficult to follow. The final paragraph also moves from the last-ranked country to a broad statement about the remaining countries and then back to Germany. Grouping the figures more consistently and using clearer references would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “largest producer” and “ranking,” so the reader can understand the subject and the main comparisons. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, such as “Chaina,” “bigest,” “prodice” and “possition.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “electricity demand are very little” and “share the 6 to 10 position” do not describe the data clearly. Aim for accurate forms and standard collocations, such as “ranked sixth to tenth” and “consumption was lower.” More precise comparison vocabulary would also help you distinguish similar values from large gaps.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple sentences and longer structures, including the overview beginning “Overall, except Germany…” and the sentence starting “Meanwhile.” Meaning is generally recoverable, but grammatical errors occur frequently and sometimes make relationships unclear. For example, “every country shows the higher electricity production compare to the consumption” has problems with the comparative construction and verb form; “The top five countries … is” has subject–verb disagreement; and “they produce … and use …” shifts awkwardly between singular country and plural pronoun. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “the last five country such as” and the comma before “Korea,Rep.” Practise accurate agreement, comparatives and complete sentence patterns before adding more complex clauses.

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