Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the bar chart illustrate the amount of householdes by thier incommen annual in US for the years 2017 to 2015

overal, according to the shown the year of2015 has the highste number which is almost 50,000 mellion while the other years are approximately the same with fluactuated score number between less than 25,000 to 30 mellions.

morover housholds on 2007 has presente around 30 mellions high score with shifted score from 15 to 30, which is around 25,000

as far as , the amount of housholds categories on us for the year 2011 is almost 100,000or more and varied to 25,000 to 49,999

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response makes an attempt to describe the chart and includes a broad comparison between years, but it does not accurately identify the main features. The overview says 2015 has the highest number, apparently referring to the $50,000 category, although the chart’s highest figure is 33.5 million households earning $100,000 or more. The statement that 2011 is “almost 100,000 or more” is also unclear and does not match the data. Several categories and trends are omitted or confused, and the response is substantially below the required 150 words, leaving the task only minimally addressed. To improve, give a clear overview of the highest and lowest categories and report a few accurate comparisons across all three years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and further comments, with linking words such as “overall” and “moreover.” This gives the reader some sense of progression. However, the ideas do not develop in a clear sequence, and the final sentence beginning “as far as” is difficult to connect to the preceding points. The response also lacks clear paragraphing and does not consistently distinguish the years from the income groups. Use one paragraph for a concise overview and another to compare the main categories, moving through the years in a consistent order. Clearer links between each comparison would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some vocabulary relevant to describing data, including “number,” “approximately,” “categories,” and “varied,” and it attempts to refer to income bands. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices frequently make the meaning difficult to understand: “householdes,” “incommen,” “highste,” and “fluactuated” are examples. Phrases such as “shifted score” and “high score” are not natural ways to describe household totals, while “50,000 million” confuses an income threshold with a number of households. Practise accurate spelling and use standard chart language, such as “the figure rose to,” “remained stable,” and “households earning.” This would make the limited range more precise and appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts several sentence forms, including an opening description and sentences introduced by “moreover” and “as far as.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors often obscure the relationships between the information. For example, “the bar chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the year of2015 has” uses an awkward construction and inconsistent spacing. The sentence beginning “morover housholds on 2007 has presente” also has problems with tense, agreement, and sentence structure. Aim first for accurate, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “The number of households earning under $25,000 rose between 2007 and 2011.” Check articles, verb forms, and punctuation before adding more complex structures.

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