Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Task:

The given tabular chart illustrates the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries due to the various tools like gun and knife in a coation, namely, Great Britain from 1998 to 2007, and further it also depicts how the percentage was increased for each degree of injury during the given time period.

After analyzing the tabular chart, it is clear that in case of fatal diseases, period of 1998 - 1999, the number of fatal injuries was 49, which escalated to 72 until the year 2000 - 2001. likewise, whereas, the figures decreased from 96 to 68 in the year 2003 - 2004.

Furthermore, the collective number of fatal diseases injuries from gun and knife crime was 184 from 2004 to 2007. In contrast, serious injuries they got from gun and knife crime was at 162 in the first given time period. Serious injuries increased continuously to 392 in [redacted phone]. However, the figures for these injuries was 416 and 437 in [redacted phone] and [redacted phone], respectively. There was a difference 65 injuries in [redacted phone] and [redacted phone] period.

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Moreover, the percentage increase for these injuries was 18 for fatal, 194 for serious and 405 for slight.

Overall, it is clear that people experience maximum number of slight injuries from these weapons, whilst minimum number of fatal injuries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response fails to address the task prompt. The instructions clearly ask to describe a chart regarding US household income, but the student has written about fatal, serious, and slight injuries from weapons in Great Britain. This is a complete mismatch of the data provided. Consequently, the response is off-topic. While the student attempts to report figures and percentages, the content is entirely irrelevant to the prompt. To improve, you must carefully read the provided visual data and ensure your summary directly reflects the information presented in the specific task question.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response shows some attempt at paragraphing and uses basic cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'In contrast', and 'Overall'. However, the logical progression is severely hampered by the inclusion of fragmented, incomplete sentences and repetitive phrasing. The text contains several broken lines and disjointed segments, particularly in the latter half, which disrupts the flow of information. While there is an attempt to organize the data into categories, the lack of a coherent connection to the actual task makes the overall structure ineffective. Improving the clarity of transitions and ensuring sentences are complete would help the reader follow the argument more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There is a reliance on basic terms such as 'number', 'figures', and 'injuries'. The student attempts to use some academic vocabulary like 'illustrates', 'escalated', and 'collates', but these are often used in contexts that do not make sense due to the off-topic nature of the content. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'fatal diseases' to describe injuries, which is imprecise. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'slight injuries that occurs'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures. Many sentences are incomplete or lack proper punctuation, making the text difficult to parse. The student attempts to use complex structures, but these are often faulty or result in confusing syntax. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using articles correctly. Proofreading for sentence fragments would also significantly improve the clarity of your writing.

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